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Potter
PotterLv35yr
2019-04-30 07:27

I just started reading it. I am on chapter 3. Honestly, I like where the story is going but the grammar and sentence structure is very bad and it is super uncomfortable to read. Its ok if you are an ******* writer when you put these up on royal road but after coming to webnobel.com and having these chapters premium, I thought you would atleast get a decent editor. The main problem is the tense of story. Why is it present? It is all wrong. I do hope that you correct it or atleast get an editor to do this if you are uncomfortable changing your style. I will still continue to read this story. I don't know if it's possible but I hope the the author reads this review and reflects on it.

Lord Shadow

Keikokumars
3.9
1906 Chs

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shanor
shanorLv5

lo why is the word amatur blocked?? i did not use an 'e' here so this does not get blocked

5yr
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Keikokumars
KeikokumarsAuthor

Don't worry about it being blocked. The algorithm of the webnovel might mistake it for a curse words. It happens to me all the time. Anyway, I am thinking about hiring an editor and probably will advertise it on the forum. My previous editor have all run away so....that explains a lot of the grammar mistakes in the beginning. Anyway it does get better in the later chapter. Though you have to survive the grammar Hell in the earlier chapter first...And I do read it and take your comments seriously. Don't worry. You can also contact me on discord and other platforms. And I usually read comments on the newest chapter

5yr
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Venerable_Truesoul
Venerable_TruesoulLv3

Regarding usage of tense past tense is simply a convention and not an absolute necessity ; depending on how the novel is structured , present tense can be used as well albeit with some difficulty since it requires a more radical approach to the writing even so some of the best authors have used the present tense as well in their novels moreover there's a style that involves switching between the tenses as well especially if the story involves multiple POVs or timelines to convey a certain element of ' uniqueness ' or : intensity' between parts that showcase distinct emotions or viewpoints such a style if properly executed can lead to an interesting result in the case of this novel based on how it's structured .

5yr
Felix_Neros
Felix_NerosLv13

This is all wrong. I shouldn’t be up here. I should be back in school.

5yr
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Indomaret
IndomaretLv14

Exp

4yr
MonoNautilus
MonoNautilusLv5

oh gods you are fucking pathetic, you gave a 1 star review just for grammar. If you dislike it then give 1 star for this and then judge the other points for what they are.

4yr
alfie0123
alfie0123Lv13

Keikokumars:Don't worry about it being blocked. The algorithm of the webnovel might mistake it for a curse words. It happens to me all the time. Anyway, I am thinking about hiring an editor and probably will advertise it on the forum. My previous editor have all run away so....that explains a lot of the grammar mistakes in the beginning. Anyway it does get better in the later chapter. Though you have to survive the grammar Hell in the earlier chapter first...And I do read it and take your comments seriously. Don't worry. You can also contact me on discord and other platforms. And I usually read comments on the newest chapter
4yr
RAJ_BHAI_0167
RAJ_BHAI_0167Lv1

Can I upload this novel in audio book form on Youtube using India name please give me permission

Keikokumars:Don't worry about it being blocked. The algorithm of the webnovel might mistake it for a curse words. It happens to me all the time. Anyway, I am thinking about hiring an editor and probably will advertise it on the forum. My previous editor have all run away so....that explains a lot of the grammar mistakes in the beginning. Anyway it does get better in the later chapter. Though you have to survive the grammar Hell in the earlier chapter first...And I do read it and take your comments seriously. Don't worry. You can also contact me on discord and other platforms. And I usually read comments on the newest chapter
4mth
Keikokumars
KeikokumarsAuthor

no

RAJ_BHAI_0167:Can I upload this novel in audio book form on Youtube using India name please give me permission
3mth
Other Reviews
screwyoujerks
screwyoujerksLv5

I feel so betrayed. In the beginning of the story the author depicts a fantastic character who doesn't seem to involve in being lustful Pig or tied down by any sort of companionship. It felt like a man against the world is trying his best to survive to grow stronger to Triumph. The setup for the Apocalypse had me waiting for the Mythos oh, but then he added Sofia. At first I thought he's going to handle it properly were is this going to be a short a Ally until they parted ways. But then it turns the classic light novel Horror Story of girl teases guy but in the most annoying way possible you hate the girl you want her gone but the guy endearing towards her and they had some sort of fake love that blossoms and makes you want to tear your eyes out. The story which had such a good start and idea, was destroyed to the point where it's unrecognizable. Please understand that if you read this book you will not be getting the quality characters that you seem to be promised in the beginning. You see his first companion die you think the author has balls. But it seems like they are cut off by someone halfway through the beginning. I would not suggest to read whatsoever! Also please read through the other comments hidden between the 12 year olds who don't know what actual relationship should be like are negative comments you point out the faults in the story. This isn't a complaint this is a warning do not waste your precious time to grow attached to a character who will be destroyed in the most gruesome way an author can!!!!!

6yr

Vaettir
VaettirLv5

I won't comment on the grammar and spelling mistakes, since many have already spoken about it. It's amazing how someone can take a good idea for a very good plot and turn it into such a horrible novel. The romance for the MC and the Female Lead is as dumb as possible. He tries to make it an epic romance, but fails terribly. Either they are apart because the FL is a dumb b*tch, or the are together with the FL whining and complaining about the MC. And the poor bastard just takes it, over and over again. This whole idea is so plain stupid that the MC nearly sacrifices his life for the FL so many times, and the times he needs help she is never around because she needs to be stronger for the MC. What is the point of that if she is never around when he needs it?! On the other hand we have another love interest that practically killed herself to save the MC, that stands by him, supports him, understands him, but NO!! The FL has to be the romance for the MC. It gets so annoying that I find myself wishing the stupid spoiled FL to just die. I honestly think the author must have had a really screwed up relation in his past to think of love as he does. Whatever that is, it's not love, neither here nor in hell!! The characters generally are well written, meaning the are not 2 dimension characters. they have their own backgrounds, reasons, hopes, etc. The issue here is that the author spends as much time writing about the side characters as he spends on the MC. And he keeps on jumping perspectives. One moment we are following the MC doing something important, and then we are watching some non important character doing a monologue about how beautiful the sky is. The time jumping also is a bit too much. Time travelling is supposed to be either impossible or prohibited by the higher powers, but every few chapters we find another time traveler, or someone with memories about the future. The really good parts about this novel is when we are following the MC. He is a decently written character, besides his stupidity in romance and the main love interest. But regarding his "cultivation" an advancement the chapters are pretty interesting. And the challenges he faces are well done as well. Besides correcting the grammar and spelling (FIND AN EDITOR!!) and slowing down the changes of perspectives, all the author would need is a realistic romance or no romance at all and the story would improve drastically...

5yr
Hydrosphere
HydrosphereLv5

I mean the story is very boring, there's so much transition from future and the past, like mann can you just calm the fck down, i mean like wtf its very confusing. Example the next chapter will be in the future instantly then will show you the future mc, like i mean if you're gonna show the future mc whats the point of building the character right wtf

6yr
Panda_Express
Panda_ExpressLv15

One of the best novels I've read in a long time, possibly ever. Loved the story on RR and reading it here would also be great considering I read a s**t ton here as well.

6yr
MoonAshura
MoonAshuraLv5

The story je great and I really like it on RR. Si I am juste writing a review to say so. One hundred and fourty characters!!! again, again, again and again.

6yr
ikan
ikanLv13

Good stories. Have been following it from RR..will be one of the best original novel in this site.. great character development, interesting plot, although sometime quite confusing with all the timelines, but worth the read.. so this review need more than 140 words, hoping that I have write this review more than 140 words.. goddamnit QI..

6yr
RG1986
RG1986Lv3

Reveal spoiler

5yr
EvilAsura
EvilAsuraLv14

i read it on royal road finally its here . good story i recommended it to everyone who likes action and great plot 140 chars 140 chars 140 chars

6yr
Zare
ZareLv15

I really like this story but the huge problem is that the amount of spirit stones needed to unlock chapters is a ton and I don’t even get close to enough from daily stones to open them and I don’t have the money to buy them.

6yr
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