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screwyoujerks
screwyoujerksLv56yr
2019-01-21 23:50

I feel so betrayed. In the beginning of the story the author depicts a fantastic character who doesn't seem to involve in being lustful Pig or tied down by any sort of companionship. It felt like a man against the world is trying his best to survive to grow stronger to Triumph. The setup for the Apocalypse had me waiting for the Mythos oh, but then he added Sofia. At first I thought he's going to handle it properly were is this going to be a short a Ally until they parted ways. But then it turns the classic light novel Horror Story of girl teases guy but in the most annoying way possible you hate the girl you want her gone but the guy endearing towards her and they had some sort of fake love that blossoms and makes you want to tear your eyes out. The story which had such a good start and idea, was destroyed to the point where it's unrecognizable. Please understand that if you read this book you will not be getting the quality characters that you seem to be promised in the beginning. You see his first companion die you think the author has balls. But it seems like they are cut off by someone halfway through the beginning. I would not suggest to read whatsoever! Also please read through the other comments hidden between the 12 year olds who don't know what actual relationship should be like are negative comments you point out the faults in the story. This isn't a complaint this is a warning do not waste your precious time to grow attached to a character who will be destroyed in the most gruesome way an author can!!!!!

Lord Shadow

Keikokumars
3.9
1890 Chs

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Immortal_Kaizer
Immortal_KaizerLv13

U really want to share your hate to the novel... Did u

6yr
15
screwyoujerks
screwyoujerksLv5

Okay so a response saying exactly why I said what I said and getting into more detail about my exaggeration of the term betrayed, why I got so frustrated with the novel, and that my opinions my own it doesn't really matter in the fate of the world. But then I had a Chinese error sign occur oh, sorry Mandarin. So still trying to retype it, ill just say I did have a good response xD

Immortal_Kaizer:U really want to share your hate to the novel... Did u
6yr
19
Keikokumars
KeikokumarsAuthor

Sad you felt that way. Hope you find a good book

6yr
13
screwyoujerks
screwyoujerksLv5

I will give u credit ( also if you're wondering about any terminology I use such as the word betrayed oh, I will reply to someone who askes about this same deal) but u do a good job with eesponseding to bad comments, I don't know if you remember this is fraction at all but you told me to continue reading. And because continue to create a good mithos and world-building that's going to continue but then the 30 SpiritStones for chapter stopped me. I posted review more of an explanation because if I bought Spirit Stones to read up until the newest chapter I could have bought a full set of harrypotters books. But since I plan on getting a month membership I will probably finish reading up to the new chapter because u said something earlier stuff is explained.

Keikokumars:Sad you felt that way. Hope you find a good book
6yr
2
Keikokumars
KeikokumarsAuthor

I hope that the question you want to get answered do get answered in the chapters. And thanks for reading my story. I know my weakness in grammar but that is also explained in the author note. It is ahrd when changing sites because I used to be in RR and most of them already know my story and why but Webnovel seems to have a higher readership. Had to try once in my life to get my name known right?

screwyoujerks:I will give u credit ( also if you're wondering about any terminology I use such as the word betrayed oh, I will reply to someone who askes about this same deal) but u do a good job with eesponseding to bad comments, I don't know if you remember this is fraction at all but you told me to continue reading. And because continue to create a good mithos and world-building that's going to continue but then the 30 SpiritStones for chapter stopped me. I posted review more of an explanation because if I bought Spirit Stones to read up until the newest chapter I could have bought a full set of harrypotters books. But since I plan on getting a month membership I will probably finish reading up to the new chapter because u said something earlier stuff is explained.
6yr
3
notAfreak
notAfreakLv14

I am pretty sure I felt the same way as you, good start but I think the author lost some of his brain juice after he made Mc and sofa allies. TeeHee

5yr
17
Milosic
MilosicLv12

Wow i see you dont know what actual human relationships are like but its your opinion i guess good for you.

4yr
1
Milosic
MilosicLv12

Tho i aint gonna lie i kinda get what you mean lol, it was annoying at the beg kinda but it got a lot better

4yr
1
deleted_javascript
deleted_javascriptLv3

Thanks for the warning, I try my best to avoid these types of novels. Lucky for me I read comments. (Sorry if it offends you Author it's just my honest opinion)

4yr
13
FACE_IS_LAUGHING
FACE_IS_LAUGHINGLv2

At first reading chapter 1-30 wow this is good but then the timeline got twisted. Past mc present mc future mc then somewhere in the universe. I don't get it so I totally skipped that kind of shit. A game with xianxia with reincarnation with system, slice of life? A ****ed up love story. Anyway the chapters are repeating. 😂

4yr
5
MonoNautilus
MonoNautilusLv5

Important: Is the editor notes fake? Why there are so many bothersome things like 'should have save' 'could runned later' etc? Also why do you use ' and not " for talks? (not that important but still.) and then you use caps for all titles and stuff within the story which I find really ugly. It's most just because of the first problem but together with the reviews that aren't made by some fanboys or people who don't know how to rate/make a review right, I pride myself in having reached the chapter number 26 without getting extra temperamental or cursing everything about your and your novel existence. That's it.

Keikokumars:Sad you felt that way. Hope you find a good book
3yr
2
Nazarach
NazarachLv5

Thanks for warning ppl off this novel ^^ I think I would have fallen for the same pit as you - good beginning with level haeded mc and then it apparently devolves to... let's call it the usual scenario >.>' Is there a novel (or more) you can recommend that keep their promise?

3yr
1
JSKOPOP
JSKOPOPLv13

Reverend insainty or lightning is the only way

Nazarach:Thanks for warning ppl off this novel ^^ I think I would have fallen for the same pit as you - good beginning with level haeded mc and then it apparently devolves to... let's call it the usual scenario >.>' Is there a novel (or more) you can recommend that keep their promise?
3yr
3
Nazarach
NazarachLv5

RI I'm already neck deep in since a long time ago x) it's THE best novel here imo ^^ litow I will give a look :) many thanks :D

JSKOPOP:Reverend insainty or lightning is the only way
3yr
1
Monarch_Lord
Monarch_LordLv3

same

deleted_javascript:Thanks for the warning, I try my best to avoid these types of novels. Lucky for me I read comments. (Sorry if it offends you Author it's just my honest opinion)
3yr
1
0THeunkown0
0THeunkown0Lv4

3yr
1
Deathy_70
Deathy_70Lv3

Welp

3yr
Lazy_Chicken_God
Lazy_Chicken_GodLv13

So... harem?

Keikokumars:Sad you felt that way. Hope you find a good book
3yr
Narcii_9dar
Narcii_9darLv12

I wish I had read this before reading this but well I dropped it anyway so whatever.

2yr
Yoshitaka_Fukuda
Yoshitaka_FukudaLv1

Thanks for sparing me the time. Was about to read it.

2yr
1
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Vaettir
VaettirLv5

I won't comment on the grammar and spelling mistakes, since many have already spoken about it. It's amazing how someone can take a good idea for a very good plot and turn it into such a horrible novel. The romance for the MC and the Female Lead is as dumb as possible. He tries to make it an epic romance, but fails terribly. Either they are apart because the FL is a dumb b*tch, or the are together with the FL whining and complaining about the MC. And the poor bastard just takes it, over and over again. This whole idea is so plain stupid that the MC nearly sacrifices his life for the FL so many times, and the times he needs help she is never around because she needs to be stronger for the MC. What is the point of that if she is never around when he needs it?! On the other hand we have another love interest that practically killed herself to save the MC, that stands by him, supports him, understands him, but NO!! The FL has to be the romance for the MC. It gets so annoying that I find myself wishing the stupid spoiled FL to just die. I honestly think the author must have had a really screwed up relation in his past to think of love as he does. Whatever that is, it's not love, neither here nor in hell!! The characters generally are well written, meaning the are not 2 dimension characters. they have their own backgrounds, reasons, hopes, etc. The issue here is that the author spends as much time writing about the side characters as he spends on the MC. And he keeps on jumping perspectives. One moment we are following the MC doing something important, and then we are watching some non important character doing a monologue about how beautiful the sky is. The time jumping also is a bit too much. Time travelling is supposed to be either impossible or prohibited by the higher powers, but every few chapters we find another time traveler, or someone with memories about the future. The really good parts about this novel is when we are following the MC. He is a decently written character, besides his stupidity in romance and the main love interest. But regarding his "cultivation" an advancement the chapters are pretty interesting. And the challenges he faces are well done as well. Besides correcting the grammar and spelling (FIND AN EDITOR!!) and slowing down the changes of perspectives, all the author would need is a realistic romance or no romance at all and the story would improve drastically...

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Hydrosphere
HydrosphereLv5

I mean the story is very boring, there's so much transition from future and the past, like mann can you just calm the fck down, i mean like wtf its very confusing. Example the next chapter will be in the future instantly then will show you the future mc, like i mean if you're gonna show the future mc whats the point of building the character right wtf

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One of the best novels I've read in a long time, possibly ever. Loved the story on RR and reading it here would also be great considering I read a s**t ton here as well.

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MoonAshuraLv5

The story je great and I really like it on RR. Si I am juste writing a review to say so. One hundred and fourty characters!!! again, again, again and again.

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Good stories. Have been following it from RR..will be one of the best original novel in this site.. great character development, interesting plot, although sometime quite confusing with all the timelines, but worth the read.. so this review need more than 140 words, hoping that I have write this review more than 140 words.. goddamnit QI..

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Reveal spoiler

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i read it on royal road finally its here . good story i recommended it to everyone who likes action and great plot 140 chars 140 chars 140 chars

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ZareLv15

I really like this story but the huge problem is that the amount of spirit stones needed to unlock chapters is a ton and I don’t even get close to enough from daily stones to open them and I don’t have the money to buy them.

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