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Hawkkkkkkkkkk
HawkkkkkkkkkkLv106yr
2018-09-16 20:56

This is... Bad. There's absolutely no actual story to this. All the relationships are superficial. The characters are plain... Trash. The interactions are incredibly unrealistic. The writing and grammar are terrible. Judge for yourself, just keep in mind that there's a reason that all the good reviews read like incoherent ramblings.

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Depresso_
Depresso_Lv10

In a way I agree with you but not because of grammar or interaction of characters but because how ***** and stupid Mc actually is. I can't handle such peace loving and kind characters, he has no backbone at all kind off puss.y, never kills and cares about random strangers. I thought that it will change as he grow stronger but as I see its getting worse and worse, he don't act like someone with power at all.

InfiniteSuns
InfiniteSunsLv6

LOL guys you just literally saved me from reading this, i don't understand why but i hate these kind of characters the most "peace loving and kind characters" caring about strangers,killing for them is forbidden,friendship everywhere, ugh everytime i see novel with character like this, i get urge to vomit

SrWeedalot
SrWeedalotLv5

Thank you for saving me.....Peace loving pussies are the worst.

Depresso_
Depresso_Lv10

Yeah me too, I would like a character like Zamasu had when he was in Goku Black form, killing, destroying and terrorizing because he thinks that's right and he doesn't give a sh*t about mortals and god's alike. It actually would be good fanfic with Zamasu possessing Goku or Gohan slowly but steadily increasing his power for his zero mortal plan to come true. The system would be nice element too. I hope someone already has similar idea.

InfiniteSuns:LOL guys you just literally saved me from reading this, i don't understand why but i hate these kind of characters the most "peace loving and kind characters" caring about strangers,killing for them is forbidden,friendship everywhere, ugh everytime i see novel with character like this, i get urge to vomit
CultivatorSonny
CultivatorSonnyLv4

I can already tell everyone that replied is a Vegeta fanboy... Cause he is BADASS

Hawkkkkkkkkkk
HawkkkkkkkkkkLv10

I read further to see, and the quality of the story doesn't improve at all. The writing isn't good, the pacing is worse, the dialogue is absolutely abhorrent. Like, the way the characters talk to each other is incredibly unrealistic.

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Depresso_
Depresso_Lv10

Really? "normal human mindset to a bloodthirsty sayian, in the later parts he stops caring and starts killing" I have read the story longer as you suggested but there absolutely no such things as you listed above.. Becoming bloodthirsty? Don't make me laugh, he's more like becoming a god of friendship that bloodthirsty or anything close to that. And the part about being manipulative, he's not. Just gaining some worthless worshiper on eath by good mean playing hero. He can just make them submit by his own powers or create artificial treats and save them later. He can do that to many other planets but no, he sitting back on earth and befriending everyone without a second thought. Author makes him look like a spectator to all of this and just rewrite original DBZ story that's all, and that doesn't MC badass or bloodthirsty at all as you mention before. And I will stick to my previous opinion and say that he's mega puss* hero-warrior, with a lot of power which he never uses and does nothing except creating a relationship with weak as.s women. And Vegeta is wrong about Kalan, he's not proud saying, he's just a worthless trash pus.sy with no backbone at all.

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Depresso_
Depresso_Lv10

If you're looking for an Mc who don't really give a sh.it about others try this one "Astral God Black". In the start, he looks like a caring kid, but after he leaves his clan, you can see his true personality which is ruthless and uncaring for everyone. This one has MC which is at least 1000000% better than this puss* in DBZ.

InfiniteSuns:LOL guys you just literally saved me from reading this, i don't understand why but i hate these kind of characters the most "peace loving and kind characters" caring about strangers,killing for them is forbidden,friendship everywhere, ugh everytime i see novel with character like this, i get urge to vomit
unorthodox
unorthodoxLv5

Yeah nice try promoting your novel in a comment

Depresso_:If you're looking for an Mc who don't really give a sh.it about others try this one "Astral God Black". In the start, he looks like a caring kid, but after he leaves his clan, you can see his true personality which is ruthless and uncaring for everyone. This one has MC which is at least 1000000% better than this puss* in DBZ.
Depresso_
Depresso_Lv10

My novel? Look who's is author, and compere grammar in my comments and in the novel. You will have the answer. I just promoting hidden gem, which is covered by alot of shi.t like this DBZ fan fic

unorthodox:Yeah nice try promoting your novel in a comment
TrueImmortalDevil
TrueImmortalDevilLv6

You dont even know the most annoying part ... author made mc so dense he dont dobt visit his gf (bulma) for years and mc gets cobfused why she is mad like he havent done anything wrong ...

InfiniteSuns:LOL guys you just literally saved me from reading this, i don't understand why but i hate these kind of characters the most "peace loving and kind characters" caring about strangers,killing for them is forbidden,friendship everywhere, ugh everytime i see novel with character like this, i get urge to vomit
Beyond_Namez
Beyond_NamezLv11

He says he made the character as dense as him. He's probably never even talked to a chick lmao.

TrueImmortalDevil:You dont even know the most annoying part ... author made mc so dense he dont dobt visit his gf (bulma) for years and mc gets cobfused why she is mad like he havent done anything wrong ...
TrueImmortalDevil
TrueImmortalDevilLv6

He cant be that dense ... can he? Is that even humanly possible?

Beyond_Namez:He says he made the character as dense as him. He's probably never even talked to a chick lmao.
Beyond_Namez
Beyond_NamezLv11

he is super dense. There was a chick in his discord right? He offered her an owner rank and since I had some drama with her she banned me with his permission even though there are no rules. :lol:. The only girls he has talked to is on the internet and he bows down to them.

TrueImmortalDevil:He cant be that dense ... can he? Is that even humanly possible?
AMJ
AMJLv10

HAVE Y'ALL NOT READ/WATCHED DBZ? Goku (The MC) is literally a peace loving character. He even killed his own brother when Raditz told him to destroy earth

InfiniteSuns:LOL guys you just literally saved me from reading this, i don't understand why but i hate these kind of characters the most "peace loving and kind characters" caring about strangers,killing for them is forbidden,friendship everywhere, ugh everytime i see novel with character like this, i get urge to vomit
TrueImmortalDevil
TrueImmortalDevilLv6

I did and i read all chapters of this and i am geting more and more disapointed couse he is 10x more stupid and dense then goku about relationships which is basically humanly impossible

AMJ:HAVE Y'ALL NOT READ/WATCHED DBZ? Goku (The MC) is literally a peace loving character. He even killed his own brother when Raditz told him to destroy earth
TrueImmortalDevil
TrueImmortalDevilLv6

Also dbz manga is basically trash couse its so diffrent from true story ...

AMJ:HAVE Y'ALL NOT READ/WATCHED DBZ? Goku (The MC) is literally a peace loving character. He even killed his own brother when Raditz told him to destroy earth
AMJ
AMJLv10

The Manga is the true story

TrueImmortalDevil:Also dbz manga is basically trash couse its so diffrent from true story ...
TrueImmortalDevil
TrueImmortalDevilLv6

Yes the normal db manga got 42 books but then there are the other once ... the once named dbz which are trash ... and they even overlap ... both got raditz in theim but they look diffrent...

AMJ:The Manga is the true story
TrueImmortalDevil
TrueImmortalDevilLv6

The dbz manga is not the true story ... the true story is in the normal dragon ball ... the dbz manga is between book 17 and book 30 roughly ... the time overlap as i said

AMJ:The Manga is the true story
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