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Haowie
HaowieLv136yr
2018-10-12 13:21

Writing quality has seriously gone downhill. Ever since the author has added more fanfictions and books on this site the release schedule has been abysmal at 1 chapter perday. Every chapter is just fluff where nothing important happens. Kalan's reduced to a measly side character who's trying to maintain the original story, but the story has already deviated too far from the original to the point where his efforts are futile. I wasn't on board the Bulma train from the get go and reccomended multiple times that he didn't romance Bulma. I don't know why Toga even paired Kalan and Bulma together in the first place if he was just going to Yamcha him. Bulma's excuse for not being together with him is because he trains to much? Lol wait till she finds out how much Vegeta trains, adding on that Vegeta can't make clones of himself. Chapter 130 is my dropping point. It felt like a big FU to my face. An entire chapter dedicated to eating food. It seems like the author is losing interest and this is going to be dropped. I'll revisit on the future to see if his writing has improved, but as of now my review stands. Haowie out!

The Strongest System in Dragon Ball World

Toga
4.1
131 Chs

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Gingnami
GingnamiLv2

What a waste of my time. Chapter 130 probally triggered his entire readerbase.

6yr
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Haowie
HaowieLv13

I just think he needs to improve his writing and figure out where he wants to go with this. If i wanted to follow Goku throughout his adventures I'd rewatch DBZ. Kalan didn't need to start a dojo, he didn't need to attack Freiza, and he didn't need to start training everyone if he really wanted to preserve the timeline. He should've just got Broly's Bloodline and moved on. Maybe start an adventure elsewhere like universe 6 or something then meet up with Goku once he reaches the Freiza arc.

Gingnami:What a waste of my time. Chapter 130 probally triggered his entire readerbase.
6yr
1
AdrianVeidt
AdrianVeidtLv11

Yeah, got high hopes on this novel... And then got destroyed by food chapter........

Gingnami:What a waste of my time. Chapter 130 probally triggered his entire readerbase.
6yr
Neverlightning
NeverlightningLv5

Lol I have long since dropped this but it looks like Author dropped this, cause 3 weeks ago there's chapter 130 but 3 weeks later it's still chapter 131 lol

6yr
CornboyRay
CornboyRayLv4

Fuck you you short dick bitch. The author is at least trying. Comment when you have something posted on here you virgin

5yr
1
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_EMI_
_EMI_Lv4

The best. Everything is perfect. This is THE BEST dragon ball fanfic. . Please don't drop this. And don't rush the story, like many other fanfics. Keep up the good work.

6yr

Hawkkkkkkkkkk
HawkkkkkkkkkkLv10

This is... Bad. There's absolutely no actual story to this. All the relationships are superficial. The characters are plain... Trash. The interactions are incredibly unrealistic. The writing and grammar are terrible. Judge for yourself, just keep in mind that there's a reason that all the good reviews read like incoherent ramblings.

6yr
StarInTheNight
StarInTheNightLv5

Fcking he is human in earth and don't know anything about love?ARE FKING THINGKING WE ARE IDIOT TO BELIVE HE IS FKING DENSE BECAUSE HE IS SAIYAN?just because u want trunkz to born?lol this is kalan story not FKING Goku and Vegeta story please be more smart... FKING i bet u love your lover be NTR before

6yr
Bakar
BakarLv6

Just Love it . Keep it up😍 Gkdhdhdydtotzyoreyeydirqtistdyxyfy9d9z5885s8z855e59e96e5idyodoyd5id8z8tt9eyoodpfyodoydyspfufupdotdtzitzitzi5Gkdhdyeyd yodtodtiz58ztidodoye69eyod

6yr
D_Jormungand
D_JormungandLv14

I like this story very much. There is nor many dragonball fanfiction in the first place. Make sure to make this one as good as or better than "the strongest legend of dragonball" That story is all good from the start with only a bad part at the end when there are another multiverse story included. Thus, make sure you do better than them. I will be cheering. And please don't be like some fanfiction that you just dropped it halfway and give the reason like wanting to train the writing. Anyway, thank you for the good story.

6yr
GreRREg
GreRREgLv4

Very good keep going when will take Brolys blood that's the question I have in my mind. Will Kalan someday have God Ki maybe learning and mastering Ultra Instinct would be cool or something similar

6yr
TempestWolf1013
TempestWolf1013Lv15

Good just Keep it up and keep the stable updates For the 140 word count - fxuxfixfuxufxigg jgixgxifxitsiusrrsuuraaruhRrajrfssgkgzgxkogcdhdksgurgxxkgxogxxyxtditdraqwwetyyuiooppllkjhggfddsazzzxxccvvbnmmmknjj

6yr
Feudal_Lord
Feudal_LordLv4

I QUIT. Wtf man? Everyone wants bulma and kalan but they broke srsly when it drop from 2 chapters everyday to 1-2 chapters everyday i still didn't comment anything about it but kalan and bulma should be together. Kalan even wish eternal youth for bulma whats the use of that now? Your novel is getting good to bad bad to worst it sucks. Just get kalan apologize to bulma and get them back together. This chapter sucks.

6yr
Shadowles_Immortal
Shadowles_ImmortalLv14

This one of the best dbz fanfic I've read so far. keep up the good story. Hopefully this doesn't somehow up with mc teleporting to say the walking dead with zero power. But yea good story n developments also great update times. This time of story deserves my ss. 😁👍👍🤓

6yr
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