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KillerHemboy
KillerHemboyAuthor6yr
2018-08-20 15:00

Author here, finally writing a self review to promote my novel. This is my second book, and I must say I am finding it more and more fun to write and make the stories in my head come alive for you. Unlike my first which had an uneven pace in the beginning, this one is has been written with all the experience I have accumulated. I always wanted a book like Release That Witch where there would be awesome kingdom building along with the MC also being OP. And a system makes everything much more fun of course. So I started this novel. I am really humbled by the great response and will continue to be stable and steady with my writing and release frequency. This novel, like my first one, is also planned out to have a definite end, so it will not be dropped. Thanks for reading both this review and the novel, and I hope you continue to follow my novels. Cheers! Author out!

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Juto
JutoLv14

Thanks for the effort, cannot wait to start this journey to see how this novel turns out.

LionWannabe
LionWannabeLv12

WOW, the best original novel I've ever seen. stable pace, great story, and nice background + system. i think you should bring some romance to him, to push him more, encourage him to be stronger and stronger. overall its nice to have some romance development, and become strong together.

kanukai
kanukaiLv5

Is it gonna have harem cause if it is then its not for me

KillerHemboy
KillerHemboyAuthor

Nope, no harem, I guarantee that

kanukai:Is it gonna have harem cause if it is then its not for me
kanukai
kanukaiLv5

Thx

KillerHemboy:Nope, no harem, I guarantee that
HaelBlue
HaelBlueLv5

Author-ge please make it as bl we super duper love bl

rolfzx
rolfzxLv15

What happen T__T This chapter has been deleted. Please go to The World Domination System or Webnovel home

DeathLingers
DeathLingersLv14

Oh thank you well this is added

KillerHemboy:Nope, no harem, I guarantee that
KillerHemboy
KillerHemboyAuthor

The chapter got deleted by mistake and got reposted an hour later....so the link is different. So please go back to the previous chapter and you can get to the next one :D

rolfzx:What happen T__T This chapter has been deleted. Please go to The World Domination System or Webnovel home
KillerHemboy
KillerHemboyAuthor

Again, thanx a lot for your words. I really appreciate them.

LionWannabe:WOW, the best original novel I've ever seen. stable pace, great story, and nice background + system. i think you should bring some romance to him, to push him more, encourage him to be stronger and stronger. overall its nice to have some romance development, and become strong together.
KillerHemboy
KillerHemboyAuthor

Thank you! Hope you are loving it!

Juto:Thanks for the effort, cannot wait to start this journey to see how this novel turns out.
KING_IMMORTAL
KING_IMMORTALLv4

Will there be romance and action

Chaotic_Winter
Chaotic_WinterLv13

Can you say the genre of the novel, ex: action, advection, harem, romance etc...????

MistofOblivion
MistofOblivionLv7

That sentence just wiped away my hesitations 💞

KillerHemboy:Nope, no harem, I guarantee that
ArashiTenebris
ArashiTenebrisLv5

hey author, since this site is quite limited so I can only send this bellow, if you want for more, PM me at royalroadl (name "royaldarknes") I have some writing information I like to share with you here (this is only for research to improve, not mean to force you to write in a certain way) (I do sometimes update new material and tips here including in the comment of the post, there are new material near the end of my first post, it have #NEW tag with it ) https://***.royalroadl.com/forums/thread/98644 (this give advice on how "not" to write here, and how to use Cliche right, it also have other good videos like when to "tell" and when to "show" ) (and yes,I send this to multiple author ,mostly the new and inexperienced author or the one who haven't know some of the convenient tool in my post [sorry,not try to be arrogant],if you think the link is fake then check my post that at page 1 of the "Assistance Request" part of forum in royalroadl)

KillerHemboy:Thank you! Hope you are loving it!
iFckUselessAuthor
iFckUselessAuthorLv12

I want to read but i dont like mc name .. Daneel ? So no .. The name sound like shiit ..

KillerHemboy
KillerHemboyAuthor

Action, adventure and Kingdom Building with no harem

Chaotic_Winter:Can you say the genre of the novel, ex: action, advection, harem, romance etc...????
ArashiTenebris
ArashiTenebrisLv5

feedback from chapter 30: This is because traces of high-quality Ether had been detected on the thieves at the time that they interacted with host. This was not detected before due to the absence of the module.] (Do not see the logic) It's like a hero met a thief and killed him. A year later he found a device detecting eavesdropping bugs. And with the help of it discovered that the thief whom he killed a year ago (and whose corpse had already floated down the river) had on himself a listening bug... Although the situation in the chapter is even more implausible. The author is too lazy to explain the situation, I will prompt a variant. (Ether had been detected on the map left after the thieves) But this will have consequences. Ether trace will remain on things for months and this should be taken into account in the future plot. And do not conflict with the previous explanation about the absorption by the land of used ether.

KillerHemboy:Action, adventure and Kingdom Building with no harem
KillerHemboy
KillerHemboyAuthor

Thank you, I have bookmarked the link and will be checking it frequently :D

ArashiTenebris:hey author, since this site is quite limited so I can only send this bellow, if you want for more, PM me at royalroadl (name "royaldarknes") I have some writing information I like to share with you here (this is only for research to improve, not mean to force you to write in a certain way) (I do sometimes update new material and tips here including in the comment of the post, there are new material near the end of my first post, it have #NEW tag with it ) https://***.royalroadl.com/forums/thread/98644 (this give advice on how "not" to write here, and how to use Cliche right, it also have other good videos like when to "tell" and when to "show" ) (and yes,I send this to multiple author ,mostly the new and inexperienced author or the one who haven't know some of the convenient tool in my post [sorry,not try to be arrogant],if you think the link is fake then check my post that at page 1 of the "Assistance Request" part of forum in royalroadl)
ArashiTenebris
ArashiTenebrisLv5

oh and sorry about the link to my post one, forgot that the link will not work on this site, instead, you can just google this and you will find my material post "royalroad Forum And Writing Directory for Authors "

KillerHemboy:Action, adventure and Kingdom Building with no harem
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pipMcDohl
pipMcDohlLv5

In a typical Chinese cultivation light novel, the main character start from the lowest strength only to rise above all. For this miraculous outcome the MC has the help of something that is a complete cheat for cultivating. The MC along the way encounter bad guys, selfish idiots who think they are better than the rest and attack and try to humiliate other just because why not. Trashes. The MC will punish those selfish idiots by attacking and trying to humiliate them because he think he is better than them and because he have the excuses that they were the one who started it. The MC is a freaking psychopath that can murder those who offend him just like that. The other characters that exist are the good guys, that are meant to witness the power of the MC and give him opportunity to get violent with the excuse of protecting the weak against the bad guys. side characters, good or bad, don't need deep personality the just need to trigger the events and thus are shallow. The women are especially shallow thanks to sexist culture. They are just their to fall in love and be sexual trophy. The plots are usually rushed and full of holes. So where is World Domination System among the mass of Chinese cultivation novels? Woman: So far almost no girls in sight. no sexism aside from the fact that all the key spots are hold by men. The MC is not a murderous psychopath. But only because he think he is not powerful enough yet to kill those who offend him. so psychopath is yes. are the side characters only divided with good one and bad one just for the sake of having the MC get violent? Yes, the bad guys will get offended over nothing and the good one are way to kind to be realistic. It's all white or all black. The characters are very shallow. The story don't really care about character building to the point that the one and only friend of the MC is a character that we don't see interacting with the MC. He is just mentionned here and there, and of course he will get bullied by bad guys. So his job is to be a token that trigger the MC's revenge. He don't need to talk or think. the story is only focus on the growth of the MC and him kicking asses. Finally the cultivation cheat Yep it's there of course. it will allow the MC to get strong in everything. strong body, magician, magic craftsman, etc... The originality is his cheat pushing the MC toward world conquest. it should be something that bring an abnormally high deepness to the intrigue and plots. But no as expected of a typical Chinese cultivation random story, this become disappointing as well. Let me spoil the first financial success of the MC as an example: to cultivate energy is required, bloc of ether can release useful energy and thus are pricey. Alas mosquitoes are eating the blocs of ether. In order to protect the warehouse from mosquitoes, the usual method is... to erect expensive magical barriers that only last a few month then must be replaced. The MC find a way to bait and trap mosquitoes, protecting the warehouse at a cheaper cost and thus making tons of money. Flaw one: why stopping simple mosquitoes with expansive military grade magical barrier when you can just build air-proof warehouse and store the bloc of ether in pouches airtight shut? it's just normal weak mosquitoes... it's like killing flies with a rocket launcher. Flaw two: the MC doesn't test his invention over the two month it is supposed to be effective. The effectiveness of his traps might decrease over time for unknown reasons and it can all backfire in his face. Flaw three: the MC sell his product at a given price and receive the entire sum of money as benefit... what about the price for opening his store, what about paying salaries to the manager, etc.. The kingdom is supposed to have heavy taxes policy that cause turmoil and anger among the citizens, yet the MC don't pay any taxes? The plots are rushed and only what allow the MC to be a righteous violent psychopath is relevant for the author. So yeah... Overall another typical cheap cultivation story here that just copy past all the cliché except for sexy women as trophies.

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