The fact that my review was blocked just because it was pointing out the obvious flaws is weird. I criticized the author for his terrible world building, insane, rushed developments & this terrible system. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________. Example 1: MC Leonard was talking to his family and a girl, and the author forces some stupid, Almighty being to just magically transport the MC & company into a damn zombie 'The Walking Dead' world, so the MC can get stronger. Seriously? Let's just go to a new zombie world guys, so forgot the previous world that I barely even talked about. So we had to deal with this rushed 'The Walking Dead' arc .__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Example 2: The author wants us to believe that people in this world are so stupid, that they view ELVES as actual demons. The continent where ELVES live, is called the Demon Continent. Magic casting, bow shooting, affinity for nature, hunting, things we know elves for, all completely forgotten. Different groups like Forest/High/Dark...etc Elves are all now EVIL DEMONS in the eyes of this specific world. I understand wanting to be unique, but trying to make elves come off as "demons" is just...no. Author does not even mention WHY this world hates elves, or what the elves did to be called "Demons." With the real demon people in other stories, some are good and bad, like any group of beings. If you are going to write about fantasy, do it correctly. How stupid would a book sound if it mentioned dragons as "orcs," or if you talked about fairies as "ghosts," or if humans were called "beastmen." Like no niqqa, I don't have a damn lion head, I am a human. Just like these elves are elves, not demons. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ These identities exist for a reason, and trying to change them to make humans seem that stupid, is not helping you at all. It just shows how terrible your world's backstory will end up, and terrible it is. We only heard about a few kingdoms, one being the Kingdom of Evergreen, and that is all. This brand new world full of possibilities, and the author barely even talks about it. He spends more time talking about this random loli Mavis that the MC met (harem member) ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Example 3: MC obtains a damn zombie army as a reward from the system, since he is a Necromancer. Now, we've all read books on how you must conceal that dark, death energy, because all of the holy churches/strong worldly people near you can sense it. This world fears necromancers due to their history. The MC might be evil and kill them all to make a stronger army. What does the MC do with this zombie army out in public lol? He somehow just makes the zombies go around town and hides them... with no one seeing a zombie or sensing all that damn zombie army death energy.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I understand magic ONLY works how the author writes it, so if there is no death energy to even conceal, then people can't sense any of this evil, death energy that an army of zombies would normally give off. The problem is that the author doesn't even bother about magic and how it actually works in this damn world. So, whether or not an army of zombies SHOULD leak out some death energy, is 100% on the author to tell the readers. (which was never specified in any of the chapters) ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Example 4: In chapter 80, the MC has a damn dagger against his neck, ready to be killed at any moment by this powerful, rank 7 assassin called Luminous. She's an Inquisitor of the Holy Church. MC mentally talks to the system, then commands two zombie knights via mental orders, & instantly subdues this powerful assassin. As an assassin especially, she should NOT be this easy to take down or subdue. Where are the escape tactics? shadow magic? Does she not have a brain to use? In fact, she knows he is a necromancer due to all these damn zombies she fought previously. Once he dies, the zombies will revert back to their old nature. All she had to do was just kill him, which was VERY easy to do; but nope, the author has this crappy plot armor where she somehow can't even think due to the zombie "surprise", and gets caught by two weak ass zombies. In just a few sentences, she swears her allegiance to the MC and serves him so she can live. Like, seriously, this is so shxtty to read sometimes. Logic is thrown out of the window during fight scenes._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Example 5: Chapter 100, he was then sent to the wonderful game world that is SWORD ART ONLINE. Yes guys, if you can't tell, the author is just sending the MC to the worlds of other authors, and having random things occur. He seriously has Kirito and the MC battling dungeon bosses... I could understand these events if this was supposed to be a fan novel for SAO, or The Walking Dead, but it isn't. So making your MC hop into worlds that other authors have made, it just shxtty writing on your part. Be original and stop making the MC enter worlds we already read about. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Example 6: chapter 171 turns into a **** scene with the MC Leonard and harem member Ryan (she abused him & r@ped him before). She wants him to nut inside and take responsibility (GIVE HER A BABY). MC surprisingly shoots his load inside after thinking it through...yeah, give her the pill or magical abortion lol. Chapter 185 is just the author using some names from the Overlord anime series to describe the new Lich servant....like come on, how is this novel 5 stars to anyone? I understand wanting to pay some respect to other authors if they inspired you, but to blatantly use their names and their worlds is NOT good writing. World building does not exist basically. The MC is so bland, so you can imagine that the side characters are there just to exist, and obey the MC. I would feel nothing if any of them died, because the author has made them to have no personality. This novel is 3 stars, AT BEST. Be wary when reading this if you are looking for a serious novel to read. If you don't mind all of the issues, it is still a somewhat okay novel to read if you can forgot about logic and whatnot.
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Right right, about how great the elves were and how they’re not evil? And then slap a 1.5 star for it all, I have to say- why don’t you write something and post it on webnovel?
the race stuff your talking about sound dumb. if they are called demons by human and you call them elves when they call them self something else that goes to show you names do not matter. as for why they are hated it is even ******r not a good reason so no one will speak about. until you get to their kingdom to get their side of the story you shouldn't care much.
the entire review of Booty in of itself is already difficult to comprehend, this guy clearly did not try to understand what I actually wrote, a good example of that was the "Overlord" references, I'm sure that was a joke written within the comment by another reader, he just dug around the chapters looking for stuff to put together into what look like a review and "critic"- I do hope he actually picked up this one though- the so call "elves" or "demon" of the world, don't called themselves that. trying to comprehend what he's trying to say would give people brain cancer. Example 5 also clearly backed up what I just said about him spilling bull**** and didn't bother to read and comprehend human language. the synopsis literally stated **** like that will happen... funny how he would never try to replied back since the last time he got roasted by another reader and deleted his review and now came back and blamed WN for deleting his "critic" and pointing out "flaw". taking the dao of shamelessness to another level.
7sins_Lord:the race stuff your talking about sound dumb. if they are called demons by human and you call them elves when they call them self something else that goes to show you names do not matter. as for why they are hated it is even ******r not a good reason so no one will speak about. until you get to their kingdom to get their side of the story you shouldn't care much.
BigBootyLover, did you read the synopsis before reading? I guess not, the second example is basically bull****. why were Americans enslaved by brits? it was because of a ****** skin color, now let's look at elves. they got long ears, more sensitive to magic and able to manipulate nature. humans by nature are racist, that is the fact, they knowingly or unknowingly abandon or just hate the ones who are different than them. for 4th example... imagine feeling secure because you subdued your enemy and you think that he has no more allies and in a second or so two of his minions which have the same strength as you do jump on you. what would your reaction be? and btw, if you were an elf and were to show up in a village in 21 century you would be at minimum chased out of the village. now imagine appearing as an elf in the 14th century... yea, burnt at the stake immediately, no questions asked.
Man you nitpick hard, not that I care. But uh please don't tell the author that he can't make elves demons because it messes with your underdeveloped cognitive ability.
Lmaooo bruh. This is a review section, where people post reviews for a novel that they read. I myself then wrote a review, talked about the things I disliked, to give others some info to this novel. That's what reviews are for. Now do yourself a favor since you "don't care," and stop using ad hominems. Crying about my review because I don't like some below average novel is just a sad thing to do.
Avrin13:Man you nitpick hard, not that I care. But uh please don't tell the author that he can't make elves demons because it messes with your underdeveloped cognitive ability.
I don't much care about your review at all, I just think one thing you said was stupid, which is the whole "using other authors worlds" where, there are countless amounts of fan-fictions doing the same thing? Are you gonna complain about every last one of them? As long as he doesn't just abuse the canon plot, what's the big deal?
BigBootyLover:Lmaooo bruh. This is a review section, where people post reviews for a novel that they read. I myself then wrote a review, talked about the things I disliked, to give others some info to this novel. That's what reviews are for. Now do yourself a favor since you "don't care," and stop using ad hominems. Crying about my review because I don't like some below average novel is just a sad thing to do.
Not that I agree with his stance but why make that last argument it’s literally so dumb. Asking him to write on web novel it’s like if he writes it and it happens to be better than yours then what? He wins the argument? It’s also him expressing his opinion whether it’s right or wrong I honestly haven’t read to that point yet maybe he’s just pulling **** out of his ass but I digress it’s annoying how people make the argument of you shouldn’t be judging if you haven’t done it because it’s an normal reaction to judge it’s not like if there were two orange juices You would have to be a connoisseur of orange juice to judge it you just do that’s how you differentiate good from bad. What I’m trying to say is critic his argument which for the most part you did which is good but you also criticized his character which makes no sense because for the most part I think the work has to be separated from the artist. It’s like if a racist cunt wrote a cure all for cancer you’re not going to dismiss his finding just because he’s a racist. This is just a pet peeve of mine and I’m ranting dont take what I say too seriously but yeah don’t do it :p
Oniichan_Thickskin:Right right, about how great the elves were and how they’re not evil? And then slap a 1.5 star for it all, I have to say- why don’t you write something and post it on webnovel?
Bruh i read your review all the way thru and you have your valid points but my question is... why the **** did you read that far if you disliked it so much... there was a fan-fic i read the MC said he hates betas but becomes one i only read up to at least 30 somethin chapters and then dropped it. There had to be something too make you want too keep reading 😅
He read so far so he can have valid points to trash the trash fanfic.
JoKeRtHeBrOkEr:Bruh i read your review all the way thru and you have your valid points but my question is... why the **** did you read that far if you disliked it so much... there was a fan-fic i read the MC said he hates betas but becomes one i only read up to at least 30 somethin chapters and then dropped it. There had to be something too make you want too keep reading 😅
What he said was true and he stated some valid points for real so you can't just be like "yu dont write novel you noooo good **** yu"its a fucking review section what else is he supposed to do?rate your fucking **** 5 stars?
Oniichan_Thickskin:Right right, about how great the elves were and how they’re not evil? And then slap a 1.5 star for it all, I have to say- why don’t you write something and post it on webnovel?
Other than going to other author's world and elves being demon arguements, every other arguements of his seem valid. Also that elves being called demons is author's own world building. I mean, why not? Humans can be mammals, human can also be demon? Yes, ofcourse. Take example of a criminal who raped many virgin little girls with his human body. Isn't he basically a demon in human race? Maybe authors made elves demon in a way that their deeds are demon(demonic). After all in this novel perhaps demons ain't a race but a group of beings who did evil. In some novels, they are said to be a race with horns. However if you look at "some" novels you would see demons can be anyone who practice demonic techniques which requires blood of innocents. Also there is that thing about going to different author's world? I mean it's a fanfic already, as stated by author in his discription. I don't know if the novel has the disclaimer of a fanfic or not but since the author said he told it's a fanfic in his discription then it's alright. After all, Going into other authors' world does make it a fanfic. And since author already told that in his discription then your point of that becomes invalid. Though I didn't read the novel, I can point out these invalid points from yours just by looking at it. Note: There is no hate. Just like how you gave a critique to this novel, im giving a critique to your review.
Hmm🤔 5 star for the review 😅 but 'seriously is the fanfic good?
then booty why u dont go to fcking pay? THIS IS FREE U IDIOT
i am so confused is this fanfic good or not
I agree except for elf point ofcourse because there are several animate that show elf like this most of them have imbd 7.6 or 6.8 so people dont notice much
