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ExtremePrejudice
ExtremePrejudiceLv66yr
2018-10-12 11:08

too much nonsense going on . the plot is messed up . even the MC is messed up . 100 chapters in but the MC is weak as a pig. even in normal translation NOVEL the MC can be strong.. but the MC in this novel is like a pig , he even got a SYSTEM. character's name are so fvcked up. no naming sense. story development are so forced. READ AT YOUR OWN RISK. the dialogues are dumb as a chicken , too much redundancy. (DROPPED)

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Oniichan_Thickskin
Oniichan_ThickskinAuthor

Oh boy, if you think this naming sense is bad, wait till you see some of the stuff out there- calling people out on their naming sense is just rude😒😒😒

Oniichan_Thickskin
Oniichan_ThickskinAuthor

Talking about mc getting strong, you dropped it right at the door, the next arc is the power leveling. 😂😂😂

ExtremePrejudice
ExtremePrejudiceLv6

hahaha you're funny . its not rude. im just stating facts. i mean who the h3ll would name a woman "RYAN". hahahahahahah . and >> you should read your own novel , so that you will know how much nonsense it is. oh and yeah i've read hundreds of novel's be it korean, japanese, and chinese. your naming sense is one of the worst. its not me being rude but its the truth. have you not heard the saying SIMPLICITY IS THE BEST? . and try to differentiate between gender's so that you can figure out a name for both gender's okay? and bro. you took 100+ chapters to get to the part where the MC gets a power up ? oh boy oh boy . its like it took you a day to finish your lunch. LOL good luck

Oniichan_Thickskin
Oniichan_ThickskinAuthor

Simplicity is the best? Nope never heard of that one. Maybe it’s just me or does the wording felt somewhat...aggressive?

ExtremePrejudice:hahaha you're funny . its not rude. im just stating facts. i mean who the h3ll would name a woman "RYAN". hahahahahahah . and >> you should read your own novel , so that you will know how much nonsense it is. oh and yeah i've read hundreds of novel's be it korean, japanese, and chinese. your naming sense is one of the worst. its not me being rude but its the truth. have you not heard the saying SIMPLICITY IS THE BEST? . and try to differentiate between gender's so that you can figure out a name for both gender's okay? and bro. you took 100+ chapters to get to the part where the MC gets a power up ? oh boy oh boy . its like it took you a day to finish your lunch. LOL good luck
Oniichan_Thickskin
Oniichan_ThickskinAuthor

Plus the name Ryan, sure it’s a male name- usually, but it doesn’t mean that no one named a female that- another one, asking me to go to a mental hospital just for that? Really? Is there a point in being that toxic?

ExtremePrejudice:hahaha you're funny . its not rude. im just stating facts. i mean who the h3ll would name a woman "RYAN". hahahahahahah . and >> you should read your own novel , so that you will know how much nonsense it is. oh and yeah i've read hundreds of novel's be it korean, japanese, and chinese. your naming sense is one of the worst. its not me being rude but its the truth. have you not heard the saying SIMPLICITY IS THE BEST? . and try to differentiate between gender's so that you can figure out a name for both gender's okay? and bro. you took 100+ chapters to get to the part where the MC gets a power up ? oh boy oh boy . its like it took you a day to finish your lunch. LOL good luck
ExtremePrejudice
ExtremePrejudiceLv6

usually? hahahahahahaha you're so funny . why waste time on arguing ? it took you 100 chapters just to get the MC a power up or leveling ? .you cant take a critic arent ya? im laughing so bad here reading your comments, and thinking your a 12year old child that doesnt want to lose arguing hahahahaha. GOOD LUCK. Rainbow signing out. hahhahaha RIP

Oniichan_Thickskin
Oniichan_ThickskinAuthor

critic? you mean telling me to go to a mental hospital because I named a female character Ryan? you really do have problems, I felt like arguing with a mental patient- either that or have some social issue. -know what? I'm done.

ExtremePrejudice:usually? hahahahahahaha you're so funny . why waste time on arguing ? it took you 100 chapters just to get the MC a power up or leveling ? .you cant take a critic arent ya? im laughing so bad here reading your comments, and thinking your a 12year old child that doesnt want to lose arguing hahahahaha. GOOD LUCK. Rainbow signing out. hahhahaha RIP
Namake
NamakeLv11

You've read hundreds of novels and your grammar is still that awful? I pity your poor intelligence, then.

ExtremePrejudice:hahaha you're funny . its not rude. im just stating facts. i mean who the h3ll would name a woman "RYAN". hahahahahahah . and >> you should read your own novel , so that you will know how much nonsense it is. oh and yeah i've read hundreds of novel's be it korean, japanese, and chinese. your naming sense is one of the worst. its not me being rude but its the truth. have you not heard the saying SIMPLICITY IS THE BEST? . and try to differentiate between gender's so that you can figure out a name for both gender's okay? and bro. you took 100+ chapters to get to the part where the MC gets a power up ? oh boy oh boy . its like it took you a day to finish your lunch. LOL good luck
ExtremePrejudice
ExtremePrejudiceLv6

haha dont assume stuff. did you thought about what if english is not my native language? . and in my country we have lots of different languages . and why are you even here? Attention wh0re? . sigh people like that wants attention arent worth my time . go to a corner and sit okay? small minded people like you that seeks attention is either pitiful or doesnt have friends to talk to ,and wants some attention GOOD LUCK.!

Namake:You've read hundreds of novels and your grammar is still that awful? I pity your poor intelligence, then.
Namake
NamakeLv11

I don't think your thoughts would be coherent in any language, given how you structure them. I'm here because your "criticisms" are ridiculous at best. But please, tell me more about how small-minded I am ya fuckin' retard.

ExtremePrejudice:haha dont assume stuff. did you thought about what if english is not my native language? . and in my country we have lots of different languages . and why are you even here? Attention wh0re? . sigh people like that wants attention arent worth my time . go to a corner and sit okay? small minded people like you that seeks attention is either pitiful or doesnt have friends to talk to ,and wants some attention GOOD LUCK.!
ExtremePrejudice
ExtremePrejudiceLv6

dont cry okay? i got a lollipop that i can give do you want it ? hahaha. attention seeker detected .. GOOD LUCK with your pitiful life. what are you an english teacher? hahahahahah you're so funny like a dog that wants to play bone hahahaha byebye attention wh0re!!

Namake:I don't think your thoughts would be coherent in any language, given how you structure them. I'm here because your "criticisms" are ridiculous at best. But please, tell me more about how small-minded I am ya fuckin' retard.
Namake
NamakeLv11

Dude have fun with your life of reading ****ty harem and System light novels, jacking off to the characters cause they're described as having big tits. Let me know if you ever move out of your mothers basement you fucking inbred goblin

ExtremePrejudice:dont cry okay? i got a lollipop that i can give do you want it ? hahaha. attention seeker detected .. GOOD LUCK with your pitiful life. what are you an english teacher? hahahahahah you're so funny like a dog that wants to play bone hahahaha byebye attention wh0re!!
ExtremePrejudice
ExtremePrejudiceLv6

ok mom . byebye hahahaha oh i see you're are writer that doesnt have talent in it . you dropped your novel because you realized how much trash it is . god bless the world . one less trash novel. GOD BLESS! byebye MOM.

Namake:Dude have fun with your life of reading ****ty harem and System light novels, jacking off to the characters cause they're described as having big tits. Let me know if you ever move out of your mothers basement you fucking inbred goblin
Namake
NamakeLv11

lol I dropped my novel because the entire thing was only made to point out the kind of trash that invalid retards like you will read to satisfy your autist boners.

ExtremePrejudice:ok mom . byebye hahahaha oh i see you're are writer that doesnt have talent in it . you dropped your novel because you realized how much trash it is . god bless the world . one less trash novel. GOD BLESS! byebye MOM.
memberberry
memberberryLv5

I get up and applaud all involved, beautiful, wonderful the best of comments, fight, fight, fight.

Sanism
SanismLv2

I kinda agree with your review but why do you always start a comment with a fucking"hahahaha lookatchu you dumb ****"??

ExtremePrejudice:haha dont assume stuff. did you thought about what if english is not my native language? . and in my country we have lots of different languages . and why are you even here? Attention wh0re? . sigh people like that wants attention arent worth my time . go to a corner and sit okay? small minded people like you that seeks attention is either pitiful or doesnt have friends to talk to ,and wants some attention GOOD LUCK.!
Sanism
SanismLv2

It's like you are that quiet kid in our school who can't start a conversation

ExtremePrejudice:haha dont assume stuff. did you thought about what if english is not my native language? . and in my country we have lots of different languages . and why are you even here? Attention wh0re? . sigh people like that wants attention arent worth my time . go to a corner and sit okay? small minded people like you that seeks attention is either pitiful or doesnt have friends to talk to ,and wants some attention GOOD LUCK.!
Sanism
SanismLv2

and you also seem to be differentiating yourself from us by pointing out the fact that you read hundreds of novel.you really do not look cool but just a no life bragging that he wastes his life reading novel.

ExtremePrejudice:haha dont assume stuff. did you thought about what if english is not my native language? . and in my country we have lots of different languages . and why are you even here? Attention wh0re? . sigh people like that wants attention arent worth my time . go to a corner and sit okay? small minded people like you that seeks attention is either pitiful or doesnt have friends to talk to ,and wants some attention GOOD LUCK.!
OtherworldlyEggy
OtherworldlyEggyLv3

From your comments alone you are the worst author i ever met on webnovel

Oniichan_Thickskin:Oh boy, if you think this naming sense is bad, wait till you see some of the stuff out there- calling people out on their naming sense is just rude😒😒😒
H01Y_CR1NG
H01Y_CR1NGLv2

oh theres way worse authors who fight with there reviews In the comments on webnovel.... for example endless path infinite cosmos, he's a lot better now, but a little over a year a go dude would argue with litterally every review under 4 stars about the problems they had with the story and let's just say the arguments they had were "heated" to say the least, most the really bad stuffs been deleted now by him probably to save face.....

OtherworldlyEggy:From your comments alone you are the worst author i ever met on webnovel
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