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2020-05-02 04:30

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Bulldog
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Don’t mean to sound harsh but going to put this review up anyway. Straight off the bat from opening this novel page the synopsis is littered with grammar errors that don’t take much effort to fix, this makes me want to read the novel less and does not give me the impression the author puts effort into the novel. After looking through the synopsis I straight away looked through the comments to find people with similar opinions to me. I managed to find one stating that the novel contained a lot of spelling mistakes which I will also assume also meant grammatical errors. After reading this comment and seeing the reply back from the author which contained a message with the reply saying they he/she will review past chapters in a sartirical manner and also said that they did not find any spelling mistakes. This would be agreeable and I would have found no trouble with it if the synopsis was not in the state it was. After reading this comment I thought if he/she could confidently state there was no spelling mistakes in the chapters then that would mean he had read through them and double checked, which means he/she overlooked the grammar mistakes and made me make this comment out of boredom. I realise no everyone has the time to overlook their work but it just degrades it and stops new visitors from opening and reading what I’m sure is a good read all problems aside. Sorry if you don’t agree with this comment but had to put it up out of nessasity. Also thanks author for taking the time to make a novel in the first place.

plastic_doll
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