I had to drop this at chapter four. The book may get better but, it is asking little much when you devote an entire chapter to (This new game is a secret from everyone) and then immediately follow it with (at 20 minutes since the game launched thousands of players logged in and ""guilds"" were exclaiming wow at our MC). As of chapter 4 the main character had only bought the game 3 and a half hours ago, and only had one hour and a half of play time. For a game where the CEO is pissed that one person may know he wants to sell something, you can't suddenly throw in guilds and a thriving intake money to teal money system over a three hour period. I am sorry, you put a hard short timeframe for the main characters actions and then ignored it for everything else. It takes time for a game system.that costs thousands of dollars per unit to sell. It takes advertising for ANYone to buy it. A second chance book can be good. But this one trips over itself trying to show how OP the second chance is too fast at a cost.
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Thanks for the very honest review that you gave me, i made these when i was still inexperienced, so all i could say is, i'm sorry for the disappointment that i had caused you. I'm trying to repair those issues as well, hence stopped for a whole month of updating and started planning for the whole novel. Again, thanks for the time you had used jn reading my novel, i appreciate it a lot
I don't know how the edit system works on quidian but, at least with the guilds it may read better to introduce the individual future guild leaders taking notice as level 3-4 characters while everyone else was only level one or two. This would show them as superior to standard gamers and give a good prelude to their personal guilds later in the story.
Lol, you already dropped it, don't worry, and, i already prepared the story for 50 chapters, i can't really say what it is, but it is something i thought really hard for as i stopped writing this novel for a month
