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OneLetterBoy
OneLetterBoyLv56yr
2018-06-01 00:20

The story is good and keep the good work for more interesting upcoming chapters, maybe slowdown a bit the progress of the MC it's kinda fast forward atlest put some small dialog in between.

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OmnipotentDad
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Are you sure? Well this novel is a very slow phased, if i slowed it down more, the mc's reincartion is useless, becoming someone that wasted his 2nd life? Ir you can try and suggest here your opinion, and i'll review it, thanks for reading btw.

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Bulldog
BulldogLv10

Don’t mean to sound harsh but going to put this review up anyway. Straight off the bat from opening this novel page the synopsis is littered with grammar errors that don’t take much effort to fix, this makes me want to read the novel less and does not give me the impression the author puts effort into the novel. After looking through the synopsis I straight away looked through the comments to find people with similar opinions to me. I managed to find one stating that the novel contained a lot of spelling mistakes which I will also assume also meant grammatical errors. After reading this comment and seeing the reply back from the author which contained a message with the reply saying they he/she will review past chapters in a sartirical manner and also said that they did not find any spelling mistakes. This would be agreeable and I would have found no trouble with it if the synopsis was not in the state it was. After reading this comment I thought if he/she could confidently state there was no spelling mistakes in the chapters then that would mean he had read through them and double checked, which means he/she overlooked the grammar mistakes and made me make this comment out of boredom. I realise no everyone has the time to overlook their work but it just degrades it and stops new visitors from opening and reading what I’m sure is a good read all problems aside. Sorry if you don’t agree with this comment but had to put it up out of nessasity. Also thanks author for taking the time to make a novel in the first place.

plastic_doll
plastic_dollLv5

Author, with all honesty, your English is horrendous. You might not realize it, but the way you write is very confusing and many words are unnecessary. If u need me to list examples, I'll do so with a correction too. But I ignored that, since if I like a novel I'll read despite the hurdles. As for the story, nothing really original fyi tbh.. not that it's bad, I don't mind it. But everything is way too rushed, he becomes lvl 10 when everyone is 2&1, he doesn't even struggle killing the boss announced globally, just slash and hack, no dodge, no low health.. nothing no struggle. again, lvl2 vs lvl 15! And the CEO of the gaming company is kind to him, only kind. Yes, he offered on the phone to buy him a house, cars, pets, jets, guns and the world? And he did, the most expensive too! it's like he had a son that he now remembers? and when knowing the MCs linage(warring states era's leading martial linage), he starts crying thanking God for letting him know that the one they should serve is alive??? A cult?hmm.. What is this nonsense, seriously?.. he made 2 million $ or wtv in 2/3 days? If weed knew this, he would start killing left and right, kill himself at the end, revive, kill himself again, a loop. Oh and supposedly this isn't a harem okay? Fine even better. But noo, it can't be that dream novel?? where there's no actual harem, right!!!!??Yep u guessed right. No harem. But u look right, there's a girl "oh my so hot and cool, can I have a screenshot?" Everytime. Then left, oh not surprisingly another girl?!?? "sooo rich and handsome, if only I could marry him I will forever be happy". Idk wtv doesn't suit my taste, author I hope you improve and I sincerely urge you to check up on earlier chapters every now and then and not neglect keeping them up to date with your improvement. Reached chapter 20, couldn't continue on my injured soul.. good luck!

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