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MassttLv45yr
2019-05-26 22:20

The world, story and characters are great and quiet original for wuxia novel. Many culture are present among African, Chinese, Japanese and westerner. But the writing is really bad. Repititions and typing errors are common among other annoying things and sometimes the writing feels of, the characters know things they shouldn't or you feel you missed something that wasn't told. Honestly, I can't recommend this novel due to the writing that gets on my never. But if you are lenient on it, it's an excellent story with good characters.

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CharizmaLv6

Ok, so usually if a novel is going to have inconsistencies it is noticeable at the start. That is not the case with this novel. Minor Spoilers Ahead (not enough to ruin anything, but enough to give you an idea of the story) This novel started off explaining how Taku, the MC, is reincarnated and how he is a genius that "conquered" Earth in his previous life and now intends to conquer this new world. At first, he is overwhelmed by the crazy feats the villagers can do, but that is reasonable since even a genius can be amazed at the ability to jump across a village in a single leap. Taku gets his special ability, that all members of the race have, and leaves the village. He does some really cool stuff then goes into training and the novel looks awesome at this point, ch10-15. Next the author starts world building. He shows a few different perspectives from around the world and each of these side perspectives is that of someone with a special characteristic, so I expect that they will each play an important role in the future. I enjoyed each one of them and expect that the characters would be very entertaining in the future. Overall, so far, the character design is incredible and world building is off to a great start, ch25-30. Now, the training is over (obviously the MC completed the training). Taku now goes off to do a mission with another trainee. A bit more side perspectives... Back to mission. Here is where the first inconsistency really shows up and the story starts its downward spiral. It was stated when Taku was about to start training that he would get 1-on-1 weapons, spear and short-sword, training, for special reasons. Yet, when he goes on this mission he fights with spears and is just swinging it around with no idea how to use it. This is also where you start noticing an inconsistency with the power levels. But that is just a couple small inconsistencies and can be overlooked, ch35. Then we get another side character perspective. Starting to become a bit bothersome, but hey, we all love when good world-building finally comes together so move on. Now is when we start noticing that Taku isn't quite the genius he was made out to be and a bit more inconsistency. Taku is a team leader and is on his way, one week out, to meet his team mid-mission, so what does he decide to do? Do some training on the way, quite irresponsible in my opinion. So he meets up with his team and guess what, HE WAS 2 WEEKS LATE! So mid-mission, he decided to take a 2 week detour. So either the author was inconsistent in his writing or Taku is a terrible team leader, ch45. Then Taku does a couple more foolish things, the power levels are incredibly inconsistent, and the story is in a nose-dive. I expect it to crash hard, with no surivors, very soon. I REALLY liked this novel and lots of potential at the start, but unfortunately I don't expect it to save itself and expect it to lose readers until the author drops it midway. Author, if you are reading this, I recommend going back to the training and start rewriting. Just fix the inconsistencies and make Taku at least a decent leader or make him at least a semi-soloer. Especially fix the romance thing you have going on. Either let them **** and Taku get it out of his system so he can focus on his goals (my recommendation), or rewrite it out and level off the romance so that it happens at a better time. He states repeatedly that he is a full grown man, but you make him act like a teenager when it comes to his emotions. And fix/better define the power levels. You show that he can barely fight a level 1 beast, but then a few chapters later he is insta-killing level two beasts and fighting level 4s. And if not then start over with a new novel, I think you have a lot of potential as a writer. Don't get me wrong, I really enjoyed the novel at the start and really hope that it can be rewritten somewhat to allow for the world-building and character building, excluding the MC, to show off their potential.

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