I tried other openings that go straight to the action but the reading experience felt better with this as I think Ch1 set the scene enough for now.

Hi, thank you for giving your power stones to my WN. I hope you continue to enjoy reading it.

Hi thank you for giving your power stones to my Webnovel. I hope you enjoy reading. :)

This is a pretty good novel, I enjoyed reading the first several chapters. The author is pretty good with grammar, and pacing is good too and the actual plot and character interactions was nice to read and felt engaging. However, the poor wording really ruined the flow of reading. And the lack of updating will definitely be a dealbreaker to potential avid readers. Everything can be improved, nice start author.

Since nobody else will be real with you, I'll be the one to say it. This webnovel is trash. First paragraph in, and the author is already bumbling nonsense akin to "every 60 seconds a minute passes in Africa." Word choice, grammar and flow are terrible. There are far too many mistakes to point out. Instead of wasting your time continuing to write this, go spend your time reading quality isekai webnovels to see how your novel should be written. And at least use an AI editor this time.

Mediocre at best. A low grade story if we are being real. Poor wording, grammar and flow. Too early to judge the plot but from the first chapter I already don't want to read anymore.

This is a very unique story, very unique prose and storyline, but not in a bad way. For the most part, everything flows well, wording and grammar is good. Character interactions, dialogue and development is well written and feel good to read. But it feels like this story lacks the traditional order of ops, and the buildup climax resolution refresh that people usually read novels for, maybe because the author is dragging it out? Or maybe it is hard to recognise because of the uniqueness of this prose? I don't know why, but if you agree, perhaps this is an area of improvement, author. But other than that, I have no complaints. Nice story, author!

20 USD are you surem, author? Lol

This whole paragraph is confusing and can be much better if rewritten

This feels like a cutesy wish fulfilment romance from the author, lol. The grammar is mostly correct, the author obviously has a decent understanding of it all, for the most part everything flows smoothly, especially the dialogue which is well done, however there are many minor mistakes. I can confidently say these are mistakes and not just errors due to lack of understanding because the rest of the work differs greatly. Proofreading your work multiple times at different times will help eliminate these mistakes. However, the last update was over a month ago, you'll need to update more regularly if you are serious about it and want to make something of this novel.

Okay this is pretty good. Scenes are very vividly fleshed out. I like the repetition and emphasis, it feels very raw. The mc internal monologue as he argues with himself provides a good way to add some lightheartedness and comedic relief. Some areas that could use minor improvement is wording, sometimes the words you use are not at all fitting. For example "the (soggy) clothes got wet," or "smelt so good that I thought I (would faint if I didn't eat it.)" There are also a few typos here and there, but other than that the reading felt smooth and I actually enjoyed reading it. This will definitely be a popular novel in time.

Typo 'clothe'

I’m no expert on romance novels but this doesn't seem to be a unique take on anything, just a spinoff of the classic married to the rich guy, which isn't a problem if it were good or at least stood out from the other generic spinoffs, but at best, I can say this novel is just okay. You can definitely tell that English isn’t the author’s first language. I read the first few chapters and skimmed through the remaining chapters, and it doesn’t get any better. It all feels boring and stale, to the point where there would be no reason for potential readers to spend their time reading your novel over the masses of romance stories written by tried-and-true authors. I encourage the author to read some top tier romance novels to get ideas and inspiration and to improve grammar in order to up the quality of this story. There’s certainly nothing wrong with going back and editing chapters to improve the quality and readability as long as you don't completely butcher the previous storyline.

Exciting start

I hope his mindset will change over time to prioritise himself over the hero

MC better reach god rank

Lol that came out of nowhere

To add to this, if references to gods are offensive to you, this story may not be for you, but I will be sure not to offend faiths and religions that I know about with my writing.

Actually, I have already planned out and developed mc's powers, and I think it is super unique and cool, not anything that has been used anywhere else. And sure, I am aware that people can be sensitive to religion. The world it is set in will be expanded on hugely as the story develops.

Thank you, but please do not gift. It is akin to throwing your money in the trash because I will not receive any of it. I don't plan to monetise my writing.