So idk if this will be coherent enough but I’ll give it a shot, this story is pretty great my only problem with it is the fact author is just new and figuring out what works for example the mc only uses his weapon when he isn’t killing someone and his hands when he is killing them (mostly) and for as “strong” as the mc is it seems like he gets nerfed or everyone else gets boosted to a crazy degree and how the mc is making rookie mistakes over and over even tho he grew up in war so should know what to do (don’t wanna spoil so I’ll be vague) and some parts are definitely forced but still come off as really well written and how author has mc constantly suffer like he a secret maso or something overrall id say author just has to practice a bit more and find a good medium to find between scenes or change tags if your wondering to read this I’d say check it out cause it def is better than most fics on here (warning tho mc is a mute but learns sign language at the middle of arc 1)
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LIKEthank you for the review! I really appreciate your constructive criticisms. I think that your point of MC being experienced in war and making "rookie" mistakes hits the nail on the head. it's something that I definitely could work on. in one of the most recent chapters, I ran into that exact problem, where in all reality, MC wouldn't have made the decision that he did. I've definitely been trying to reflect on that and be better going forward. Again, thank you so much for the review!
No problem man I see you putting in effort replying to everyone questions and making changes when stuff doesn’t work can’t wait till some more chapters come out
greenbaypitbull:thank you for the review! I really appreciate your constructive criticisms. I think that your point of MC being experienced in war and making "rookie" mistakes hits the nail on the head. it's something that I definitely could work on. in one of the most recent chapters, I ran into that exact problem, where in all reality, MC wouldn't have made the decision that he did. I've definitely been trying to reflect on that and be better going forward. Again, thank you so much for the review!image