The Lost Asteroids

I will just review after reading the 11 chapters of the novel. The story seems interesting enough, even though it is a slow read. I will recommend it to those that like a story that builds up the world slowly and mysteriously. But if you want a fast-paced this is not for you. I did not know if the story will pick up its speed later, but around 11 chapters it is slow. All in all, it's a good read. My suggestion is you should update more often. Readers will love to read a novel that has a lot of chapters.

I really liked the way the author described the world in a first person perspective. I have to be honest, I don't usually like this kind of writing style but I'd say that it's definitely done very well here. Good job!

It has come to my notice that The Celestial King himself has not reviewed this novel. First, let start with the King. He sent his blessing to all the readers of this novel. ****************************** Shameless review!!! Muahahaha, I rate my book 5 stars because I believe it will be a great read! Okay, how do I say this? First, the name of the novel seems to confuse people to think that the story was happening in a spaceship. As if a Cruiser cruising, lost in space.  I'm sorry to denounce that. The story is taking place on Earth and the MC is merely an Experimental Subject in a Facility that Researches Special Abilities. (That is for now.) But we will be in space soon enough. Second, the story doesn't focus mainly on Superheroes(I don't know if there will be any). And the superhumans are not like mutants in X-men. The abilities have reasons behind their manifestations. *** Okay, since all that confusion is out of the way, let me tell you about the possible pros and cons of the novel. Cons. 1. It is slow. I want to make it fast-paced, but after writing some chapters I became bored. The whole story to me becomes vague and unrealistic. The characters were shallow and stupid. My MC was just like a zombie because there was no depth in him and the world. So, I changed and took my time to build him. I want to write an MC with personality. In a way that his behaviours, motivations, thoughts are vividly portrayed. I don't know if I can do that expertly, but I will try. 2. MC's opinion. since we are usually in the MC's head so we will be perceiving his thoughts and view of the world. Maybe he will be jealous for no reason, hate someone for his reason, be a hypocrite, lust for someone, or even just deny the truth or what is right, not because he doesn't understand, no, but for his own selfish reasons.  He is human after all!! 3. The world is the future of our current world, 2063. Which is around 42 years from now. Things that are written in this novel in 2063 are all fiction, totally out of my imagination, but they mirrored the past.  Anything that may be written around 2021 back, as a flashback of the story will have some of the real-life histories. For example; in 2021 Xin Jiping is the President of China. Not all the time we will be having a history of our world because the future is bleak. 4. Grammatical Errors. I have this love and hate relationship with grammar. I can't seem to master it well, I do what I can do because I have no real editor. So take it easy and comment on the paragraph to correct me, please.  Pros. 1. Power system is Unique on its own. I will not spoil it for you, read the novel.  (All my novels Power System are Unique) I'm flexing!!! 2. The characters are realistic and pragmatic.  3. MC is human with ability and we will explore the world through his eyes. He will make mistakes and do right depending on his feelings and what he thinks best. In short, he is not perfect. 4. The world has some depth. And there will be so many powers at play to achieve their goals. 5. It's a sci-fi novel but it borders with Supernatural elements: witches, sorcerers, curses and others. 6. I will try my best to make the novel so realistic to the point that if you remove the Sci-fi element, Power System, and amazing fights, the novel may be enjoyable to read as a slice of life. *** Here you have it. I will say that please try to read, pass 20 or more chapters because from there all things will escalate. If you can't brute-force yourself through, you can jump to Volume 2 if I reached there. Argh!!! Look at me giving so much info with only 35 chapters written. Well, nevertheless, have an enjoyable read. ....... Oops, I almost forgot. I'm open for critiques but let it be constructive, and please be lenient on this innocent soul! Above all, Add the novel to your library, leave a review, and stone me with Powerstones.

5/5 <(*ΦωΦ*)> Interesting plot, interesting setting ヾ(*ΦωΦ)ﾉ The synopsis is good, too (๑ↀᆺↀ๑)✧ I like how the first chapter is mysterious in a sense and readers will surely look forward to the next chapter! (ﾉΦωΦ)ﾉ Good work author and please continue ฅ(*ΦωΦ*) ฅ

look auther can u be more clear with hos is "I" in chapters , iits confusing af , if u atleast indicate who is the "I" that is talking its would be great 👍

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read to ch 11 nothing happens super boring book .*jjjjjjj j.g g gh high h.c ch CNN j.g f CV b bv chn ccx fvbnngcfgb BBC cfgjnccgn bv c CV bnvvhbb

i give you a five star because you deserve it, I like how the author could build the scenery so carefully to let all these doubts while giving little by little some information here and there. His writing style is very good. keep up the good work.

Interesting premise. As someone who writes and has written novels on superpowers, this novel is incredibly better than my past works, not sure of the current one though. But anyway, it starts off a bit slow, but gradually picks up from there. Interesting read I assure you.

Wow, I really liked it! The story itself is still filled with mysteries to be solved. I like how the author could build the scenery so carefully to let all these doubts while giving little by little some information here and there. His writing style is very good. The reading went very smoothly. I could not find grammar errors that got in the way of the experience at all. The plot seems very promising and different from everything I have read on this platform until now. My compliments to the author. Keep up the amazing work!

with one of the best word construction I've ever read, with a lot of mystery and really has incredible potential. Very light novel to read, really a different proposal.

It's been some time since I was drawn in so quickly and deeply by a novel. Few lines in and I'm already loving the way the character's thoughts are presented. You can tell when she's feeling or happiness. Looking forward to more. Keep up the good work.

Well, very good, a slow reading that impresses, you start a bit confused, but soon you situate yourself and understand. I don't know if I can criticize anything, but a small suggestion, you don't need to indicate the chapter number as you have been doing, the web novel itself already numbers it.

Ehhh... the book is so well written.. the author had done a good job at world building .the pacing is smooth too.. I hope the book deserves the attention it gets.

I would vote you a 5 star because instead of using catchy romance plots or thrill your book actually contains a lot of information about the galaxies beyond our planet earth... Also, your narration is very interesting, the way characters and twists in the storyline are weaved in is very commendable. The ones who love fantasized systems of space, stars, and galaxies go give this book a read and you'll enjoy plus learn a lot of things. BEST OF LUCK TO BOOK AND AUTHOR!!!

Had me lost for a little because the cover had no title. After reading the synopsis, I was mistaken. This ain't about space travels, it's about mutant superheroes! Welcome all my X-man fantasies! Note: This is a fair trade review swap. My review means nothing, only acts as a time waster for readers wanting to know more. I'm a 100% real attention seeker :P Did I get your hopes up for a minute?

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