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2021-09-20 14:41

look auther can u be more clear with hos is "I" in chapters , iits confusing af , if u atleast indicate who is the "I" that is talking its would be great 👍

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I don't know which chapter you are but, when I ever I change POV I indicate the speaker. But, maybe there are chapter that I didn't. anyway I will reread and see where. Thank you for reading.

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It has come to my notice that The Celestial King himself has not reviewed this novel. First, let start with the King. He sent his blessing to all the readers of this novel. ****************************** Shameless review!!! Muahahaha, I rate my book 5 stars because I believe it will be a great read! Okay, how do I say this? First, the name of the novel seems to confuse people to think that the story was happening in a spaceship. As if a Cruiser cruising, lost in space.  I'm sorry to denounce that. The story is taking place on Earth and the MC is merely an Experimental Subject in a Facility that Researches Special Abilities. (That is for now.) But we will be in space soon enough. Second, the story doesn't focus mainly on Superheroes(I don't know if there will be any). And the superhumans are not like mutants in X-men. The abilities have reasons behind their manifestations. *** Okay, since all that confusion is out of the way, let me tell you about the possible pros and cons of the novel. Cons. 1. It is slow. I want to make it fast-paced, but after writing some chapters I became bored. The whole story to me becomes vague and unrealistic. The characters were shallow and stupid. My MC was just like a zombie because there was no depth in him and the world. So, I changed and took my time to build him. I want to write an MC with personality. In a way that his behaviours, motivations, thoughts are vividly portrayed. I don't know if I can do that expertly, but I will try. 2. MC's opinion. since we are usually in the MC's head so we will be perceiving his thoughts and view of the world. Maybe he will be jealous for no reason, hate someone for his reason, be a hypocrite, lust for someone, or even just deny the truth or what is right, not because he doesn't understand, no, but for his own selfish reasons.  He is human after all!! 3. The world is the future of our current world, 2063. Which is around 42 years from now. Things that are written in this novel in 2063 are all fiction, totally out of my imagination, but they mirrored the past.  Anything that may be written around 2021 back, as a flashback of the story will have some of the real-life histories. For example; in 2021 Xin Jiping is the President of China. Not all the time we will be having a history of our world because the future is bleak. 4. Grammatical Errors. I have this love and hate relationship with grammar. I can't seem to master it well, I do what I can do because I have no real editor. So take it easy and comment on the paragraph to correct me, please.  Pros. 1. Power system is Unique on its own. I will not spoil it for you, read the novel.  (All my novels Power System are Unique) I'm flexing!!! 2. The characters are realistic and pragmatic.  3. MC is human with ability and we will explore the world through his eyes. He will make mistakes and do right depending on his feelings and what he thinks best. In short, he is not perfect. 4. The world has some depth. And there will be so many powers at play to achieve their goals. 5. It's a sci-fi novel but it borders with Supernatural elements: witches, sorcerers, curses and others. 6. I will try my best to make the novel so realistic to the point that if you remove the Sci-fi element, Power System, and amazing fights, the novel may be enjoyable to read as a slice of life. *** Here you have it. I will say that please try to read, pass 20 or more chapters because from there all things will escalate. If you can't brute-force yourself through, you can jump to Volume 2 if I reached there. Argh!!! Look at me giving so much info with only 35 chapters written. Well, nevertheless, have an enjoyable read. ....... Oops, I almost forgot. I'm open for critiques but let it be constructive, and please be lenient on this innocent soul! Above all, Add the novel to your library, leave a review, and stone me with Powerstones.

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