Apollyon Game of Thrones Fanfiction [Written in Second Person]

God The POV is terrible 👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎😤😤😤😫😫😫😤😫👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎

This is one of those Y/N fics that only special people like. The overall concept of the story wasn't all that bad, but the execution of it made my head spin. Especially with this first person like view that describes how YOU supposedly experience a scene and stuff rather than the character. Its too alien for me. It's like someone describing their toe nail fetish using your own pov. Because you don't experience the world in their way, and thus don't share it, it becomes an absolute xtremely trippy and dizzying reading experience that feels like you entered a roller coaster just as you got out of the car after a long trip with your motion sickness having acted up, and someone suddenly having pushed you in the front car of some messed up rollarcoaster ride with the excuse it will cure your motion sickness. .. Needless to say, I would not recommend a story from the Y/N pov

Hello there, John is my name, and as you know, I'm the author, and I'm writing this little review to clarify a few points. Firstly, the matter of capitalisation errors, you will continue to see them in future chapters, but they will later be rectified in a second more polished version of this story. Secondly, the matter of the story being written in second person, that won't change, but perhaps you can have more fun if you simply imagine it like your GM narrating a past D&D session to you. And thirdly, I ask that you honestly think about your ratings, people that give one star because they think the overall rating is too high aren't much better than people spamming five-star reviews. And with that, I wish all of you much fun with my story. :D

If this was in a normal POV, it would have been interesting ..................................................................... ..........

The POV is actually fine, yes it's weird if you're unfamiliar with it but you get used to it as you read on. For the capitalization, it's easy to ignore and well, would you rather have this than horrendous grammar. For the OPness of the main character, I'm fine with it. I actually quite like the sense of slice of life that this provides rather than the 'grind' for more abilities. Although I would like more interactions with the other characters such as her parents or her siblings.

I'm sure there is a decent story to be told here, and I'm willing to bet the author put a moderate amount of time and effort into writing and editing it but the 2nd person pov is a complete turn-off. This type of book would probably do a lot better on Wattpad where stories told in this fashion take up around 35% of the total stories on there.

I won't say much about the story, but, really, you made a Villain in GoT? There are like, 1 maybe 2 genuinely good people in the whole story and you felt like add another evil one?

lol, it's funny that people hate or review a low story because it's in the second POV stated in the description. I mean you read at your own risk but why hate when the author was honest up front, this int my cup of tea I don't do female Mc but ill leave a good review just because in the comment section I see you are very courteous to those people.

The poinT of view is such a pain like The stiry and the idea are really nice but pov is ruining it 😞😞😞😞😞😞

I dont mind the PoV, the story is good as well but take it witha grain of salt bcz this narrating style os not for everyone and I am a sucker for villain MC

Writing Quality [★★★oo] - Questionable... Story Development [★★★★o] - hmm..okay not bad I think. Character Design [★★★oo] - Don't know Updating Stability [★★★oo] - Don't know,just 'new' to this story... World Background [★★★oo] - ..... ---> Good novel..just only POV... It's a real issue here.I know why author using it and love how they explained this problem to others. But well can't change the opinion that POV ruined this. Nice try tho... just need 'fix'.Also I hope you can learn this from experiences.

Author will she always have that problem with her mind or will she be cured? I’m only 11 chaps in. Please spoil me because I don’t want to read about an mc that can be taken advantage of so easily.

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giving it a try, i'm not familiar with apollyon and i don't like the second person reading either, the plot seems ok at first but the mc is too op, it would be better if she only had a basic ability and grew with time.

I like the story, I don’t know honestly. Keep up your wok. 🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽🙌🏽

I see what they mean with the pov I legit got a headache but I ain’t complaining I’m just saying I get what they mean and honestly I like your idea using Apollon as a character she was dope I liked her wolf and sheep thing and she was a hard asf opponent even on normal mode tried realism mode pc crashed anyway ima start reading this again now besides the things like the pov it’s pretty good also I have not seen POVs like these so it’s new let’s get back to it shall we

Reading this reminds me of Stanley's Parable... It feels luke you are the narator of the fiction.... Kinda weird... Ill put 3 as a rating for now but will change it once i got more feel for this kind of thing...

The writing quality was good, It just that the story tell in 2nd pov can't make sense most of the time. The story development I can't make sense of anything just mc murmuring about this and that, with about no interaction with any character in the story. The character design was good. That my opinion Author. But who am I to judge. You do you. Me do me. I review and tell you what i think. And thank you for writing this story, even though it's not for me I hope somebody else like it.

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I had never come across second person pov before so I didn't think much before starting this, I really thought that all these people in the comments were exaggerating because in my view it's not possible that a simple pov can bother someone so much, that was up to me I started reading, I read 2 paragraphs and I was already horrified, every time I saw the word "you" it broke the immersion, I started to wonder why something like this exists, it really doesn't make sense, there are people who can read like this? I congratulate them because I couldn't stand 3 chapters, I think that was my biggest literary trauma lol.