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Hey o/ I’m a Story Writer and Reader, although I do some drawing and piano on the side. Currently writing a Web Novel. Interested? Here’s a link to our discord! https://discord.gg/tTvf4UZVpb
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~Insert Shameless Author comment~ Hey guys! This is my first time writing a full length novel, and it's the product of various ideas and smaller (800 word) stories I've written in the past. I've also gotten inspiration from all corners of the world! Including, but not limited to: - Anime (Mushoku, A Certain Magical Index) - Manga (Tensura, A Wild Last Boss Has Appeared) - Other Novels (The Beginning After the End, The Stormlight Archive) - News - Brain-picking some friends - Games (PSO2:NG, DND) - Dreams Thanks for everyone who's supporting me; both current, past and future~
I'm more of a fantasy kinda guy, so I may seem to have a small bias here~ But still, this was wonderfully written! :oo The characters are beautifully done, and they feel like they truly belong within the world they're placed in. Their struggles aren't overly dramatic, and you can follow the logical and emotional lines of thought of the characters! The story is also quite hooking! Updates could be more stable though.
An amazing tower story! :o Now, I love my fantasy, so this might seem a little bias? Unsure of what the perspective of the opposition would be... anyway! Amazing world design, complete with an Auxiliary section for those who love background knowledge! The characters are well written, and emotionally attachable~ The storyline is progressing well, and is written in a way that shows that the Author probably isn't just pulling chapters out of their ass, and that they've thought through "If this happens, what would happen next? How does this incorporate into the rest of the story? Does it fit?" Only complaints I had were some flow issues -- i.e. repetitive parts that don't need to be there -- and the stability of the updates, they seem to be of varying time between each-other, although I assume they're announced on the discord.
Not bad, not bad at all. A good story that either stays away from cliches, or tackles them well! The storyline's been thought about before writing allowing for a stable, flowing story. Only real downsides I saw were that the writing could be improved, although it's getting better as the chapters go on -- and the stability of updates, as it seems a bit... random. Characters could use some more development, but they are written in a way you can attach to them.
Look, I'm a heavy fantasy guy, so I might seem a little bias -- but hey! I quite liked this one! It's got well written characters whose personalities have obviously been thought-out extensively by the author! At times it feels like you can hear them in the ambient noise of your room, or right next to you! Only major complaint is the quality of writing, needs a touchup here and there.
Not bad, not bad at all! I do love me some magic :P Overall, the story is epic! Well written magic tied in with an pretty good relationships between the main characters, knitted within a thought-out world, with a ton of mystery sauce on the top! The only big issue I found was that the writing quality had a few errors here and there, but it got better in the later chapters!
This is definitely a breath of fresh air from all the "Reincarnated as..." stuff, now, don't get me wrong, I adore isekai, magic and all that, heck I'm writing one like that now lol. Anyway, onto the review Well written! Straight from the start sets up the main character well, we get his personality down pat in a smooth way~ The plot flows well, and the technicality of the novel goes quite smoothly with the ingrained comedy! If you've seen it flash across your recommended, or just seen it while browsing, you should definitely check it out! Only problem I had was the writing quality -- some parts need revision.
Well... I sure do like these kind of novels, but this one is outstanding! Sure, if this was the first I had read then I would've probably done a full 5 stars, but still, this one had amazing character development, a fleshed out world, and what seems to be a well thought out story, all knitted together with high quality! Keep up the great work!
Got me interested with the whole "psychopath in the uni" scheme, and although I normally dislike modern-style reads, (I'm a heavy fantasy nerd ^^') This has definitely caught my attention, worth the read! Only problems are a few grammatical errors here and there, and some tense changing, but as the book progresses, they'll improve!
Not a bad story, staying away from regular cliches or pulling them off well. Characters are developing smoothly and the story seems to have a thought out path. It needs an editor or a proof read though, seen some errors, things that don't read well, and some random tense changing in a few spots. Other than that, worth a read if you like Love-Triangle type stories!
Hey Acorn! Wew, big review 0-o Thanks for the detail, it's greatly appreciated! Let's get to the response then, shall we? World-Building: Thanks for the compliment of a solid story, assures a few doubts of mine ^^; Vague detail. I think I know what you mean, I'll try to make things a bit more clear in future chapters, although some parts are left vague intentionally~ Although if you wanted some specific terms/details cleared up then I'd be happy to explain! Also no, they won't be nomads, lol. Story: Lackluster Hopefully, things will get more interesting for you further on. Sadly I do agree somewhat, but the future is looking quite exciting! As you pointed out, this first bit was more of an introduction, but I promise things will get epic~ Just wait til the Magic System~ As with the CPH, I have been going decently low risk for this, as I'm new to this regular-chapter-releases-and-people-are-actually-reading-my-stuff, and wanted to ease myself into it, but I'll be moving onto more complex, exciting, and thus higher impact, higher risk writing as I find my sweet spot! As for the terms: Apologies for the confusion on them ^^; They'll get explained as things progress But as for the example you gave, your assumption is correct; Renvin is Rithveer's Magic System. E.g. '[Dominant Heart]. A Renvin spell...' I'll try to not have too many new terms left unexplained or unanswered if they break the flow. I can see how they'd break the flow, but I can't do it too suddenly, or briefly as that would create more problems and- Ah, ranting at this point, apologies. Grammer: Thanks for the compliment, again! If you found any issues then please report them, either in the report channel in the discord or Private Message me! Characters: Just to start: Assassins are sick aren't they :o Glad to hear the dialogue sounds good! It was one of my main worries- I'll stay, or attempt to, stay away from introducing characters that're only there for minor plot purposes, but I will say that all the major characters* shown so far will be quite important... ;P As for Aeryn & Lewis: They'll meet, don't worry about that~ I'm aiming for main characters that aren't completely overpowered, but strong; ones that compliment each other's weaknesses with their own strengths; ones that don't do everything because 'Justice is the only system to judge in life'; ones that aren't a binary 1 or 0. Main characters that you can feel, ones you can relate to, while still being distant in their own stories; caught up with their own problems, some of them being ones unique to a fantasy world, leaving your imagination to try and relate to them, to appeal to 'How would I tackle this problem?', and other's being problems anyone could've faced. I see character development as vital to a good story and I want my characters to reflect that as much as I can. Thanks for reading my TedTalk, lol. Hopefully I cleared a few things up and thanks again for the epic review! ^^