The Elden Lord /ASOIAF

When I heard what power X had, I was excited, it was disappointing, for a modern man it is really idiotic , he has a submissive mentality, his biggest dream is to be under the yoke of a lord despite that reputation, that wealth , he's an idiot, he's embarrassing when he tries to approach someone bigger than him politically , the story is difficult to read, It's written like a bad script .The conversations are shrill .

Honestly I liked the story, but it's clear that what we're reading is like a diary where the protagonist narrates his life, there's no dialogue, no thoughts or even written interaction, the protagonist simply states that something happened as if he was remembering an old story of his life, honestly I never got a Game of Thrones story that was truly good, but this one had the potential if it was written as a story, and not as a diary of his own. events.

author doesnt finish any of his stories, so i cant be bothered

I have no idea why there aren’t more bad reviews. 1. The main character is wildly inconsistent with his power usage and only remembers to use them when they are needed for the plot and continently forget them as soon as a plot point needs to be introduced. 2. The pacing is all over the place and new characters are mentioned and forgotten the next paragraph making the attempt building of seemingly meaningful character connections and the general flow of character interactions/Dialogue is cancer to read. 3. The story is for the most part narrated to you and is more of a ’tell’ rather than ‘show’ method of storytelling making it a story that is hard to feel exited about or feel any connection to the main character. Overall the concept seems like it would be a very interesting story/setting but the execution form what I have read is poor. I do hop the author takes this in to account for any further FF’s as these are not mistakes in writing you should ignore if you hope to get better. No hate author just pointing some things out I hope you have a good day futher and keep improving your writing.

All of your other novels are far better than this one you should have continued them instead of this novel. mc is idiot and hypocrite. for all his powers he wants to be a submissive one and also he had the help of north at the begining and after he ran away everything should belong to him in his opinion

Mandatory five stars from the author here!

Absolute waste, giving him the Powers of a Inventor And Not allowing him to industrialize? dropoed after 1/2 of the first chapter

Romance ? or no romance?Single female lead or harem .?

Main character has a lot of power and yet is somehow a coward who does nothing, he’s also a CUCK which makes everything even worse. So much for “destined death”

Interesting idea but what a disappointment. If you are okay with nerfed and idiotic mcs you are fine.

The stars speak for itself as the author forgets a lot of things and doesn’t make anything just well fucking good it’s like reading a diary with I don’t care what format the story takes in but half of the crao he forgets like no technically advanced crao in Westeros is completely ignores

This book frustrated me, it’s all diary entries with no explanation on how this character could do this and that power wise and finding some of the best gear with no explanation on how, couldn’t make it pass chapter 3 without it all seeming like a mess man, grammar is great and there is promise but this seems more like story overview rather then a actual story to read

the story has been really great so far .

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not a bad i find it enjoyable, if given more dialogue it's well be great and i will giv it 5 stars.

Magnificent completely without fault and just great overall plot lines. where have you been all our lives author_san

Eu estou achando incrível, Só tenho uma pequena crítica que espero que sirva para algo.. A história é muito apressada, não sei se isso é sua intenção mas você poderia ter colocado muita história, desde ele como patrulheiro, depois como aprendiz de ferreiro, depois na libertação de escravos etc etc.. Mas está muito bom, espero que não seja abandonado..

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trash . ..,....................... worst fanfic ever !

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