Little_El

Here Danzo! Taste this!

The story needs a rewrite, the idea is good but it's very badly written , it's gringe, the guy begs people so he can help them , the way the nurse spoke to him,, his way of talking about closing the hospital is unrealistic , it doesn't make you want to help, it looks like a waste, he does not need to be in the hospital to donate, he could have done it anonymously , it seems like he wants to show everyone that he wants to help , it looks bad, he could go online to look for associations, orphanages, etc. to help online ,no need to show yourself.

Thank you friend!

He is not a neutral evil, he's just a psychopath , her beef with Eddard Stark is so cringeworthy , he himself said that the wolf's forest is the size of a small country in Europe. so there's no way Stark could cross it on horseback just for a boy , he is stupid and arrogant , he didn't need to show his contempt for the lords to the villager with all that arrogance , his little war is useless and has no meaning, it only slowed down his learning and stagnated , frankly it's quite stupid and spoils the story , The beginning of the story was really great, I was really looking forward to seeing him hunting all over Planetos , even go beyond the wall in search of mammoth , unfortunately he is a psychopath who ruined everything

Random Gender *sigh * stopped here

Mary Sue SI or all the characters are adapted to his desired life

It's the story of an adult infiltrated (in a child's body) grooming a child named Tsunade

Good start, the first 15 chapters are good but you can see that the quality declines slightly as the chapters go on , it's a real struggle to read these interactions with Tenten, these uncomfortable, like those old people from the village who complimented you when I was little , he's an adult in a child's body, he shouldn't have noticed Tenten's beauty like that , see him flirting with her, God, just ewww. I hope the author fixes this , it's really important , the fact that the only description when he notices someone female is that she's pretty is pretty weird , the last chapter is discouraging, the fact that he took a mission without the consent of the Village pourrait consister à une trahison, c'est strict military government, il n'est que de la chair à canon , he is quite idiotic and thoughtless . I'm afraid that this story will end up becoming like the other story with Shikamaru SI, I have not been able to read more than 5 chapters of each other, please author don't spoil this story. If the interactions with Tenten or more precisely the main characters improve, I will return with 5 stars

He is disappointed ?Why would he need to defeat Madara?I hate these MCs who suddenly think they're the protagonist, just survived 🙄

the idea behind the story is good but there are too many bad things that make this story unreadable, The MC's father is Asian and has an Asian last name, for no reason his father calls him Clark Kent, making the MC a foreigner in his own country, the conversations are forced, awkward