One Piece: The Demon of Fire

Author i like the premise of your story but a few things can be improved. Like you tend to drag the scene everytime and make it unnecessarily over dramatic. Moreover you can use an app to correct the spelling and grammatical mistakes. Do it write now otherwise....

its a autobiography(template) system story. needs proof reader and editor. if this is not a translation (which seems like it) then the author should change the system of the template system. just ask your self this, what is the point of a template system? is it to emulate the strength of one character or is it to emulate the life of one character? cause frankly as it is currently it seems like its the latter. great potential and great concept whether its original or not its great nonetheless but no matter how great a potential or the concept of a fic is, if the delivery is bad then the story is bad in general, so its better to make sure every chapter to have as little mistakes as possible.

The idea is interesting, but nothing more. The author is not friendly with logic. The system is too complicated for him, because it involves elementary mathematics. The hero is also not pleasant to associate with. Named characters also live, simply “because”.

I'm enjoying it greatly so far. Takes inspiration from the novel "My disciples are all villains". if you've read that and enjoyed it, you'll most likely enjoy this too.

Honestly, most people will say how it's bad from the two reviews I've seen but all in all it's not too bad. The grammar is fine not the best but understandable. The main character is below average in my opinion. The background is pretty good and I like it though personally I like darker type of main characters and worlds. It's all in all just an average time killer novel that's not too good nor bad.

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one of the most unique fanfics out there. the power itself is not unique as a lot of fanfics have gone the yamoto route but this way does it in a way better then anyone else.

Yes, so awesome, keep it up. Hope I see the next chapter keep on doing the good work.

it is good ...it is refreshing to have MC who is in old body in one piece...your story development is very good so far ...and it is good that MC is not OP from the start...keep it up

It's really nice. There are very few novels in which character turns old after reincarnating. Looking forward for new chapters.

Hay bastantes incoherencias y el desarrollo es algo complicado el tipo parece olvidarse que le dió el poder de un almirante al principio al proto y la recompensa fue baja además de que al parecer no hay marines fuertes buscándolo para matarlo y se agrega el punto de que no ven nada raro en la disminucion de fuerza del viejo

It's nothing revolutionary, but it's an interesting story you should check out if you have the time. I find the weakest point of the story is the characters. I personally can not find one side character I want to see more of in the story. They are all boring and low-key annoy me

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you won't regret reading this, the Author is so professional .