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shin_rae_miu
shin_rae_miuLv41yr
2023-08-01 13:03

its a autobiography(template) system story. needs proof reader and editor. if this is not a translation (which seems like it) then the author should change the system of the template system. just ask your self this, what is the point of a template system? is it to emulate the strength of one character or is it to emulate the life of one character? cause frankly as it is currently it seems like its the latter. great potential and great concept whether its original or not its great nonetheless but no matter how great a potential or the concept of a fic is, if the delivery is bad then the story is bad in general, so its better to make sure every chapter to have as little mistakes as possible.

One Piece: The Demon of Fire

GodaSensei
4.3
84 Chs

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I_Only_Love_milfs
I_Only_Love_milfsLv14

Author i like the premise of your story but a few things can be improved. Like you tend to drag the scene everytime and make it unnecessarily over dramatic. Moreover you can use an app to correct the spelling and grammatical mistakes. Do it write now otherwise....

1yr

Ryuu23
Ryuu23Lv5

The idea is interesting, but nothing more. The author is not friendly with logic. The system is too complicated for him, because it involves elementary mathematics. The hero is also not pleasant to associate with. Named characters also live, simply “because”.

1yr
stuff0069
stuff0069Lv14

I'm enjoying it greatly so far. Takes inspiration from the novel "My disciples are all villains". if you've read that and enjoyed it, you'll most likely enjoy this too.

1yr
Upcoming_Region
Upcoming_RegionLv14

Honestly, most people will say how it's bad from the two reviews I've seen but all in all it's not too bad. The grammar is fine not the best but understandable. The main character is below average in my opinion. The background is pretty good and I like it though personally I like darker type of main characters and worlds. It's all in all just an average time killer novel that's not too good nor bad.

1yr
MMBarqawi
MMBarqawiLv4

Nice

1yr
Love_4_you
Love_4_youLv4

Not bad.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

1yr
tegar007
tegar007Lv10

Great story keep you posted on little bit on the slow side but fine[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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VonBritannia
VonBritanniaLv14

one of the most unique fanfics out there. the power itself is not unique as a lot of fanfics have gone the yamoto route but this way does it in a way better then anyone else.

1yr
Tigercat129
Tigercat129Lv4

Yes, so awesome, keep it up. Hope I see the next chapter keep on doing the good work.

1yr
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