Reviews of Vampire Primogenitor in Tokyo Ghoul Universe

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tldr: Does not deserve to be read. Writing Quality: 4/5. The quality itself is amazing, top notch but I had to take down one star due to the author insistent on not making proper paragraphs. Each chapter is very long but also a wall of text, you get used to it but it shows laziness. Updates: 3/5. Its good but not amazing. Story: 2/5. It is interesting but relays heavily on existing novels and mainly involves killing so nothing special. Character Design: 2/5. Other than the MC there are no constant characters with personality or you dont talk to them enough to see it. World background: 1/5. Does not even deserve a single star. This is a matter of opinion of course, some would think it deserve more but I do not because: As you can see by the name its a Fan fiction. The MC starts in TG, where with in 12 chapters he promptly goes to KILL all the main characters of the original, the reason given is to "get stronger", it makes sense but from my perspective this simply indicates the author is in a way stealing work and lazy, reasons? Fan fic in general are about improving, building on or changing the original story while maintaining the original feel of the story. Here the author blatantly uses this world that someone else created as a stepping stone of his own story, see the above about killing all the main characters the fans of the original work grew to love. From what the author explained this will be very similar in every other world the MC will go: naruto, academia, etc - to be clear I have no idea which world he will go to but the MC is on the evil and self interest side. Other than the fact I would not enjoy reading about this two bit MC killing a lot characters I like I strongly feel this story does NOT deserve for me to read it. If you are going to shiit all over the original story and simply use it to progress yours its just stealing, since you are too lazy to create a new world with a fleshed out background or not talented enough. I was enjoying this novel up to that point, as it can be seen I am just angry someone has the nerve to write this. If you have any respect for original content creators do not read this. (Not to say its the only novel, there a few others that do the same, like re-incarnation and go off to kill the original MC, I drop those on the spot too).

This story need to be split into more paragraths... So annoying to read. .......................................................................................................................................................................

i am enjoying reading it at first but the author decided to put lemons in it which is fine by me but it's getting annoying because the author literally make a whole chapter full of lemons and didn't stop there he just kept doing it almost 50% of every chapter after his first sex has lemons in it i am skipping it but cannot because the author makes long chapters with no paragraphs you could get lost quite easily so hope it'll get better soon i gave all my power stone so hope i won't get disappointed

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Tho, i haven't read it but i onky want to say that in this world there's no suchs thing as "he has nothing to lose" the fact that time always flies make it like he lose some precious time and not gains anything. But in this world definitely have word such as "He gains something". Just so you know that. (It's just temporary review, because i'll delete it when i finish read this FF and write some new review)

Hands down best vampire story here. wanna know the best part? chapters are long and get released often (close to daily) which is very good considering the size of chapters(2-3chapters on normal fanfics) anyways thanks for writing this and plz don't drop....or disappear.....

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The first couple of chapters were amazing! Liked how cold the MC was and his background story was also pretty nice. I thought that woman he met in the void was an annoying character but I understand she was for the MC to go through the different worlds and stuff but I thought she was a little extra. I like the first world you picked,it was a nice choice. Now let's get to the one and only part of this story so far that I have a problem with,the s*x scenes. I personally don't really care for harems and romance all that much because I feel like all that disrupts the flow of the story unless it's specifically a romance novel. The first time the MC had s*x,it was a little annoying but I thought whatever it's only this one let's continue to enjoy the novel,then the second one happened in like the second or third one after that. I thought,that's kind of getting on my nerves what the heck!? Now the story is pretty much just s*x scenes and very little real action. That's very annoying because I originally really liked this novel then the author started putting this stupid stuff in it! The only reason this story isn't getting one star is because I liked the beginning and hope it gets better.

It's great but i'cant really read it well(in my opinion) beause there isss nooooo spaaaace!! I don't even know how people aren't suffering reading this Uggh. Pleace fix it

I was very interested in reading it but it is unreadable with it all being one long paragraph. Did the author not even bother? How did it seem like a good idea to not do any paragraphs.

Would be a lot better and easier to read if the author knew how to make a paragraph. b

Great introduction, great world building. Ruined by walls of text that makes it unreadable. Wait until the chapters gets edited maybe someday before jumping in.

Like the story so far but not enough chapters to give a thorough critique. Here's 5 stars to motivate author-san. Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie! Sub to Pewdiepie!

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Two words describe this story best; gratuitous and raunchy. The unabashed gratuitous evil of the MC, Vlad, is gratifying. The raunchy conquests of the MC are not only well-written, but serve plot purpose. Warning: There are no paragraphs in this story. And hey, did I mention this story is discontinued? The author mysteriously disappeared without a word. Some say he has was consumed by Ghouls during his latest trip to Tokyo, others that he lost his way in the long-road of life.

Poor. What else can I say at least most fanfic add something new or make small changes to the characters in the original. This on the other hand feels like it steals other authors creativity to make a piss poor original story in to something passable. In what good fanfic does the MC kill all the beloved characters off for no other reason other than to "get strong" it come off as a lack off talent on this authors part that he can't make compelling characters so he steals characters from other stories only to kill them off. I just get the feeling this author has a hard on for killing even if it worsen the plot or destroys an semblance of character development.