HotIce
Author here. I am here shamelessly to give my own work with 5* :) and explain a bit about the story. Our Mc is sealed for an unknown time, but when he woke up and broke the seal, he realized he was in a foreign land. Later, slowly but surely, our Mc will find out how he end up in this foreign land (Earth). He will slowly uncover the mysteries Earth experienced such as the catastrophe 600 years ago and so on. Please be patient with the slow start :) I hope you enjoy my second work or maybe third? Nevermind, hope you enjoy my story :)
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Simply unreadable. I wanted to try this out, but itβs almost as if the author put a bunch high school-level words into a randomizer and spread them throughout his sentences in order to make his writing seem more chic. There are commas in the middle of a phrase, comma splices everywhere, run-on sentences, non-sensical sentences, etc... You name it, this author has it. Itβs almost as if this novel was written for companies to use for their interview examinations for incoming editors. Letβs not even go over the chuunibyou plot and naming. You want to try this novel? Go ahead. But donβt say you werenβt warned.
I only managed to read the first few paragraphs before giving up. The idea shows promise the execution, though, does unfortunately not live up to that promise. This story needs significant editing and spell-checking. Maybe that gets better further into the story, but I find the sentence building and grammatical errors to be too off-putting to continue reading.
Well, decent story, I gave this story average of 3.8 * for this story... Well, I really like the concept and world-building of this story, the story is interesting and the characteristic of the character also strong, but here is the thing that bothers me and makes me less enjoy when reading this story 1. The author really wants the misunderstand troupe of MC is weak from bystander continue, we'll I know it is to drive the plot but continuing it for a long time is annoying. Moreover the build-up each time when people offend the MC isnβt get paid by the conclusion, aka, the conclusion is not really satisfying... 2. I know that the MC is a kind hero before, but how he reacts and doing something is really annoying, like what the purposes of hiding his identity when you literally always blurted out his identity as master... And the stupidity why he hides his strength... 3. Less screentime of MCβs slice of life, I mean I am interested in this story because the title and the synopsis also tag make me want to read about MC slice of life as retired OP HERO... But his slice of life time is so little here, also what got us hooked about this genre, like face slapping etc isnβt included here, just like I said above, the author introduced many xianxiaβs cliche arrogant character here, but the conclusion after they offending the MC is not satisfying. <if this is counted as slice of life part of the story, well, this is getting more and more annoying... 4. Many more thing that makes me uncomfortable when reading this story, but I forgot, Iβll update it when I remember. My favorite part of this story 1. When MCβs become preschoolβs teacher 2. How he interacts with children and coax them 3. Worldbuilding and mystery of how his first world and earth connected 4. Side character building is really good Suggestion from me: 1. You canβt just think about the plot, also thinking what you want us as readers to feel, take time to think of what you want the reader to feel in each arc, chapter, or even sentence. 2. Although the characters beside MC is interesting, MC is really annoying, so if it doesnβt change the main plot, please make him change his annoying character. 3. When there is character offend the MC, please make satisfying conclusion of it. 4. I have something in my mind but I donβt know how should I say it, lol. Iβll update the review when the time comes...
Haven't read it yet, just the synopsis and your review, and it seems interesting, although i enjoyed your last work, the only problem that might be would be the grammar but it was readable so this should be too, so hey why the hell not 5 stars right ? π Hope you'll write more, I'll start reading when it gets to 100 chaps or more, keep it up.
I am sorry that i need to give such a low evaluation. I tried to read it, but my head srarted hurting while reading the first two chapter. I read novels for entertainment and to build a world in my mind while reading these stories. if i want to immerse myself into the story, it needs to have a basic level of grammar and story telling quality. I also read comments about this grammar problem and that it gets better with the chapter as the story develops. But i needed to stop reading, because my head could not take it. If possible could you please rewrite the beginning, so that it reflects the real quality of the world you build. I would really appreciate it and hope your stories get traction and your writing improves by leaps and bounds
After I finished the novel, I can say it was fun. The world's background is good, and the power system is fairly good. The biggest problem with the novel is the stupidity of most characters. Characters with limited intelligence and stupid behavior. The author should work more in terms of writing characters. I think that's all I have.
This is a very good novel which remains true to it's name till the very end. It has a slow beginning and remains slow and laid-back till the end, a slice of life novel to be exact. Don't expect too much action, it has a bit of drama, a bit of politics and a lot of fluff. Writing quality is average with a bit of grammatical errors in the beginning, characters are good and so is the world background. Yours Sincerely