Traveling in anime worlds as Crimson Abyss

I like that how smooth was the starting and how it went in flow with the other character. I'll slap this with my 5 Stars!!.

I don't see any fan-fiction of alpha. so was trying to write one. I will try to make the novel good but don't be excepted to good In just few chapters as I said I'm new to writing. I will get better as write (probably) 😅

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It's an interesting fic that I recommend reading, but it has its problems. The writing could be better and the affection system ruins what little romance this fic has. It would be better to simply remove this system or replace it with one that shows the waifu's emotional state (basically make the MC an empath for waifus). The biggest problem with this fic is that the first world is highschool of the dead and the author is really trying hard to create a plot and eventually conclude the story of this world, the problem with this is that it was never an Anime about plot but about breasts, so complicating things too much and taking too long in this world ends up making the arc boring.

Please post more chapters, maybe just 2 or even 3 chapters a week pretty please

Review Update Previous rating 3* now 4,4 as of chapter 15 the author it making his sentences clearer to the point and overall fixed the previous problems i have seen before. to get the 5 starts from me just need to get more chapters with the quality good job i have seen major improvments already from the first chapter

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I really like this fan fiction, well-developed characters and worlds on, I've already read it 4 times and it still doesn't bother me, I can read it a few more times and it still won't bother. It was nice to find such a wonderful job, I hope you will not abandon it and continue to please your readers p.s . I am looking forward to a new chapter :) (English is not my native language, I apologize for mistakes )

ok i love this and it fun keep up the good work and if you wanna continue why not use the world like overlord RWBY arknights etc (just an idea no need to take it this story is yours)

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This fan fiction hitting differently. I mean the author going to Cross Ange he going to those underrated animes and worlds he knows what he doing so get your *ss in the fanfic cause it's gonna be the best. Madara guarantees it.

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honestly, I have not seen meny other stories with the main character as a punishing Gray Raven character. I really love this story, and I hope you continue doing this

Good start I can see it has greatly been improving over time so I have decent hopes for this one keep up the good work with this and alpha is a good basis for an MC BTW

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I have this book a good try before I dropped it. I finished one full arc “world” but I don’t see myself reading further. The mc can get lovers literally by existing, there is no build up of a connection just “hi I’m mc and you are my lover now”. It might be a bit more than that but it rarely takes more than a a chapter for a harem member to join the harem. Then there are the 18+ scenes. They are very lackluster and can be summed up as “*pant * *pant * *pant * *slurp**slurp**slurp * “Oh yes ~ MC I’m coming””. There is very little variation to the scenes and they are very vanilla for a gender bender yuri. They story itself isn’t anything new, but it doesn’t need to be. We read cliche system novels for a reason.

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The grammar is atrocious, the story is sub-par.The Mc is supposed to be a yuri, but Author is so helbent on giving the Mc a pee pee, that he made Mc a hermaphrodite.The story is meh kinda hard to get into because every sentence eats 3 braincells at a time.Oh and first day in new world Mc got an Op 1 shot sword and has an op 1 shot ability(locked) also on day one.Some of the interactions seem super forced, like the first "bandit" group mc meets, made even worse by the horrible grammar.