Reviews of TO BE FORGOTTEN
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As any cultured author I have mastered the βDao of Shamelessnessβ thus I shall reward myself with a 5 star review. Overall it will be a journey of an OC MC with his crew venturing through the seas of One Piece to become the next Pirate King, simple. I intend to give my OC crew members a decent background and personality, alongside a goal, I have read many fan fics that just introduced an OC but we barely know anything about them. They just blindly follow 'just cuz'. Other than that, it is my first book, I appreciate constructive reviews but I will remove troll reviews. Thanks for reading!
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The grammar is good, it is not perfect but it is not bad either, the problem with the story is the MC, it seems that he thinks with his toes, whenever he has to choose something he makes an effort to choose the worst possible option, for example when he transmigrates he can choose the timeline, but he chooses to transmigrate only 3 years before luffy begins his journey, and above being 16 years old, completely wasting his desire that makes his training 10x more effective, the mc is too silly, And above it seems that at the rate the thing is going the mc is going to be a giant like whitebeard, although many say that in one piece it is normal I do not like it, zoro and sanji are in 180 cm and they are fine, it is not necessary to do it a giant monster.
I have dropped this novel like 3 times there are just so many things that piss me off to no end in this novel. The ROB scene was painful, the wishes were questionable, the system contains a store that does not understand the concept of balance, the MC makes poor choices consistently. Despite the starting setting having potential for a good introduction arc, the author does nothing with it, despite the island being a pirate paradise the MC runs into no issues, despite the initial state of the MC's new body it doesn't tie into any interesting plot or even have any implications. The MC is given stupidly powerful abilities at the very get-go for doing absolutely nothing, such as the custom devil fruit and the bloodline selection token. The MC is given stupidly vast amounts of Exp for missions that really don't deserve that much reward effectively destroying any interesting plot or adversity the MC might have faced while still being weak. The System is always making jarring and irritating comments to make it relevant and it just pisses me off, especially when the author tries his hand at some generic isekai humour and fails miserably only making his attempts cringe. So, all in all, I am failing to comprehend its high rating. tbh
It has potential, but the story is hurried. It look like a summary of what the story should have been. Also the main character win a lot of exp doing nothing but quests, at least make him train a bit... I know its a system fic but I can't help to think that everything is given to him without him working for it (20 level for eating a fruit ? don't count it as an exp giving item but a skill giving one!).
this is interesting.... what will he do to Luffy? you might as well reincarnate him as Luffy but more mature and smartππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
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