daoistofeverything
Disclaimer: This is going to be a bit harsh so ignore this review if you don't like critism. Writing Quality -2: Extra spaces, missed punctuation, wrong punctation, puncuation where none is required are everywhere in this novel. Examples include: spaces after an opening quote (" abc."), quotes in narrator voice, single quotes where double quotes should be, and more. Spelling and word choice need work as well. Stability of Updates: I don't care if it takes the author years to make. I'll update this rating to 5/5 if this novel reaches a natural conclusion. Story Development +1: Some twists and turns exist. Passable for a fanfiction. Character Design -2: The characters' height, weight, apparel, hair color, affect, voice, are mostly undetailed. Using more character detail would greatly benefit this story. World Background -2: The background of the world can be summed up in a single senetence. It's New York, basically. That's not good. Proper noun usage could be better to detail the locations where the plot points take place. Such as names of streets, shops the character passes running places, etc.
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Fast paced but lack of emotions, other people act like npc which make the conversation a bit cringe, the grammar is not too bad but ain't that good either. I do hope that author can slow it down and give the story a bit of life. The idea is nice, just need to improve the storyline and the conversation between mc and other people.
I've just red all the chapters in a few hours, and, I've got to say, this is how you do a Gamer fanfiction right. The stuff of legends really, loved almost every second of it. The beginning was a bit edgy, and this last chapter(21 as the time of writing this review) makes me a bit worried about what will happen next, but man if it was an absolute pleasure to see him level up this fast and act this resolute, I can only hope that there's more of the same to come for the longest time. Probably the first time in several years on Webnovel where I actively went to check everywhere on the novel page and the author's profile for a p#tre.on link to see if I could read more of it. Keep it up man!
The story concept is good, nothing new but nothing bad. The first couple of chapter were great, from 1 to 20ish it was consistent, yet around when the avengers showed up the author change the theme to a Comedy/crack fic for a while. This kinda destroy the narrative for about reasons. Nevertheless it's a fine read if you don't care much about plot and just want entertainment.
aside from writing quality (which is kinda below average, 2 stars ), other criteria are average at best(3 stars). the way author use 1st person pov on the narration is kinda bad and make most of the narration awkward to read(what should be epic turned into cringe). author need to learn when/how write it in 3rd person pov, when to use 3rdPPoV and 1stPPoV there are also typos/missing words in almost every chapter. the way author write the system notifications is also not that good, it's uncomfortable to read or sometimes confusing because reasons above. in conclusion: it's worth reading if you don't really care about the writings.
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