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TinyOrc21dCommentedtiger mouth
Until the cockpit finally stabilized, Gwen whose tiger mouths were oozing blood from clutching the web lines finally anxiously spoke up.- TinyOrc1mthReplied to Tobirama_uchiha777
It's named after one. Sauce please.
[How is that not unbalanced?! Susano'o is a freaking war god!] - TinyOrc1yrCommented
heath > heat
Kevin barely felt the heath from the flames, he noticed that his strength is increasing exponentially recently. Just a year ago, this kind of flames would feel kind of hot, like newly toasted bread, but now the flames barely feel any different from a normal breeze. - TinyOrc1yrCommented
identity sound be Identity
Chapter 2: identity - TinyOrc1yrReplied to grammer_police
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The truth is that I don't speak or write in English. I write the chapters in Spanish and translate them into English before publishing them. I know that sometimes it can be a bit annoying to see these spelling mistakes, but hey, at least you can make fun of me using that as an excuse. - TinyOrc1yrReplied to Abaddon_Steele
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It's not a good look when you're making mistakes in the first sentence of the novel.
"What in hell!" - TinyOrc1yrReplied to FadeKnight
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much worst hahaha
"I respect what Wraith is trying to do. Heck, I even know people he saved from muggers and rapists. But Waller hasn't done anything wrong. Those scumbags deserve much worst." - TinyOrc1yrCommented
To*
"Hogwarts Professor Under Compulsions, Who Is Too Blame?" - TinyOrc1yrCommented
Woah đ¨
"But why help me?" She asked, fishing for compliments to boost her self esteem. - TinyOrc1yrCommented
Real USA politics in Magical Britain, got it.
It really spoke to how annoying the SJW trained Hermione was, when the entire student body, including the Prefects, her Head of House and the Headmaster ignored her absence. She could have been abducted, and no one would notice until the next class roll call. But at least her parents raised her as a strong independent woman that reports any transgression to authorities! She was undoubtedly independent crying alone in the bathroom. What a winner. - TinyOrc1yrCommented
stuck -> struck
It had always stuck Chad as weird that Harry Potter never had any Potter elves. If Kreacher could survive in the Black manor without a master, then surely Potter house-elves could. An old pureblood house was sure to have a few house-elves, especially one as rich as House Potter. - TinyOrc1yrCommented
this should be cased correctly
introducing friends - TinyOrc1yrCommented
gor?
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God doesn't know
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- TinyOrc1yrPosted
Disclaimer: This is going to be a bit harsh so ignore this review if you don't like critism. Writing Quality -2: Extra spaces, missed punctuation, wrong punctation, puncuation where none is required are everywhere in this novel. Examples include: spaces after an opening quote (" abc."), quotes in narrator voice, single quotes where double quotes should be, and more. Spelling and word choice need work as well. Stability of Updates: I don't care if it takes the author years to make. I'll update this rating to 5/5 if this novel reaches a natural conclusion. Story Development +1: Some twists and turns exist. Passable for a fanfiction. Character Design -2: The characters' height, weight, apparel, hair color, affect, voice, are mostly undetailed. Using more character detail would greatly benefit this story. World Background -2: The background of the world can be summed up in a single senetence. It's New York, basically. That's not good. Proper noun usage could be better to detail the locations where the plot points take place. Such as names of streets, shops the character passes running places, etc.
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what's a bully staff?
He quickly fired the director, doctors and major bully staff of the hospital. Criminal cases were filed against them. But they were to keep working under strict supervision until new staff arrived.