Adros99
This ia hilarious... i understand that in a special situation u can and u will spill ur secrets... but the MC do it all... he spilled the bean right away.. is that a trending to do when ur a reincarnated? Or transmigurated? To spill and tell on every one that u are one? This is a thrash fan fic... thats all...oh? Any retort?
The idea of the plot is good, but in practice it seems that it did not work and the protagonist is very scrotal. Seriously, I think the author should do a more thorough and elaborate inspection on the protagonist and his interactions with the characters of the original anime. And try to improve it, if you, as author, also think that this is possible, and if you do not think it's possible, that's fine, disregard this comment and move on to the next.
The english is bad to say the least. The author has no apparent knowledge of the world he wants to portray. Stuff like gon and killua taking the exam when they're 10 instead of 12. Uvogin's strength has also been reduced so badly. Worst thing is that the author expects you all to know who the characters are. Taking no time to explain what they look like. I know it is a fan fiction, but it's not an unwelcome addition.
Overall i think its a good idea for a typical OP mc type fanfictions, the fact that its a HxH just makes its much better. One of the main issues i find is simply the lack of plot at this point, with having an mc this strong, its going to really difficult to write a good fight scene or any type of proper developement. Such as in the original HxH, we start learning about Gon's strength, speed, instinct, and personality through the exam and events occuring to reach the exam. Since this fanfic skipped all those, this mc simply feels like its answering questions like "what would happen if the sharingan is in HxH" or "what is someone can use a reality marble" rather then a story about a new character who has those power. Simply put, the mc doesnt matter in this story, he could be replaced by any other character you can find in any anime such as itachi and etc. In the end though, i do wish this fanfiction will continue since if polished, it can become an interesting novel with a world many dont try to write about (HxH). I honestly hope that in a momth or 2 i can come back and leave a much higher review, so good luck.
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This world needs more HxH fanfics In the first age, in the first battle, when the shadows first lengthened, one stood. Burned by the embers of Armageddon, his soul blistered by the fires of Hell and tainted beyond ascension, he chose the path of perpetual torment. In his ravenous hatred he found no peace; and with boiling blood he scoured the Umbral Plains seeking vengeance against the dark lords who had wronged him. He wore the crown of the Night Sentinels, and those that tasted the bite of his sword named him... the Doom Slayer.