Reviews of One Piece: Another Chance (Completed)

yea i don't like this at all. so the mc wipes his memories of his past life, thats cool, to start without the horrible memories and guilt is ok. but the fact that he reincanates into his 17 year old self in a world as dangerous as the one piece world with nothing but "your name is viper and eat this fruit is absolutely stupid." join luffys crew and then what? help? fight? he doesn't know how. he has not trained a day in his life in combat and his physicality is nothing special a normal athletic one piece adults physic. luffy and zorro have both trained for at least a decade to prepare for their journey, while luffy had almost as long to get used to his devil fruit abilities and develop iit a little. at least give him time to learn to use his devil druit properly. the plot is about to start and what can he do? turn into a f****** snake? granted its a mythical zoan but thats only useful later in the story at this point when he actually gets strong enough to use it to its full potential. what a way to waste 3 wishes. most of these things will be resolved in time im sure, he has apparently genius lvl intelletct(well lets see how this goes). at first i was confused sometimes on who says what. because you marked it in a confusing way, is it luffy talking or viper? i had to go back and read again to understand who it is. you will get used to it im sure but why.

Haaah, I don't even know what to say. I've read nine chapters and I'm sorry for wasting my time. Good thing I should've stopped after chapter one. I'll start in order. 1. Writing quality. The grammar itself isn't bad. I'd even bet 4/5, but there's one thing. And that's text styling. I don't know about others, but I felt very uncomfortable while reading. Dialogues, descriptions of the terrain, and so on just fit into one paragraph. You could just break them into separate paragraphs. Then it would have been much easier to read. So it's only 1/5. 2. Updating Stability. Everything's fine here. 3. Story Development, Character Design, and World Background. If I could, I'd give it 0/5. But alas, a minimum is 1/5. I'm not even going to split those three parts. It's screwed up in here. Starting with stupid desires ( Erase your memories because it'll be more fun? Spending your desire on appearances? Really?) and ending with "unexpected luck" (Finding the right world, lucky Devil Fruit appearance). And it' s only getting worse. Result: I don't recommend it to anyone. Do not waste your time and nerves.

Grammar feels super cluttered with the dialogue and the paragraphs having no separation. Character development doesnt feel fluid and the wishes don't make sense. Honestly feels very hard to read but if that's your cup of tea go for it. I wouldn't recommend it though.

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Sounds really interesting so far specially the idea of a new fruit I'm curious on how powerful it could be. I look forward to reading more and see how the story will develop.

THIS IS ONE OF THE BEST ONE PIECE BOOKS EVER!!! THE JOURNEY WAS REALLY AMAZING!!! I LAUGHED, I CRIED, HAD A LOT OF FUN READING IT!!! TO PEOPLE WHO HAVEN'T READ IT READ IT I GUARANTEE U UR TIME WON'T BE WASTED!!! THANK U AUTHOR FOR THIS AMAZING BOOK!!!

Even though the story is a bit rushed, it's still the best or one of the best "One Piece" ff I read. It's also very emotional and I would recommend it. The MC is crazy and sometimes really emotional and acts only on them. If you don't like such an MC then don't read it. If you do then give it a try for the first few chapters.

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Writing quality is instantly a four out of five because I didn’t feel like shooting myself after reading. Story development isn’t that great but it’s like eating junk food to me. I like how it’s going right now.

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Awesome story, really interesting OC and the interactions between the OC and the people are really good truly amazing. Thanks, author san for the story and hope you all the best

My first reviews will be on this fanfic, because it is now finished I feel legitimate to review it. First of all, I have to say is that it was a really nice ride. I like how all the characters are depicted, the story itself is the mc being part of the straw hat so obviously all the events will be similar, some changes were made and for the better. I think I enjoyed the slice of life parts a lot more than the rest, the interaction within the crew is top notch. I would still say that the fight are not really the best you could find, it could be better. I can’t judge grammar and such because I’m not speaking english as my first language, but everything is understandable, maybe even getting better as the chapters goes. I hope to see your others work maybe on other anime/game/book !

the story is fast paced but it doesn't undermine the quality of the story at all

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Do you even know how to use spaces and newlines? Everything is cramped to one paragraph! Reading the dialogues is a horrible experience.