Review Detail of peter_spindler in One Piece: Another Chance (Completed)

amaturewriter:why did u give this this bk 5 stars?...certain events dont match up..The idea is cliche, and the shallow relationships seem forced. And somethings dont make sense ex: the memory wipe and meeting with strawhats and the events of C2, none of it makes sense..

peter_spindler:What events don't match up? His past life and his new one? I find that his personality made by has past life has been well done. A cliche idea can be good nonetheless, it doesn't have to be unique though this book is plenty unique in the way mc does not have anything helping him i.e. A system or wishes that make him op immediately. Don't know what you mean by shallow relationships, that just isn't true. You're gonna have to be more specific of what doesn't make sense. I do believe the memory wipe makes sense when considering that mc is a smart luffy, he wants an adventure where he doesn't know where he will end up. What events in chapter 2 don't make sense

amaturewriter:5 stars for CD? Really? MC acted with strawhats as though they knew each other for days, when it was barely an hour,,,and they accepted everything like that...extremely stupid...and if u compare the OG strawhats do remember that each had arcs OR minor arcs which were extremely emotional in each arc and they all grew together, [zoro, with freedom, sanji protection, nami freedom, chopper saved life, etc..] here MC just told a story,,,extremely forced,,clearly dosnt deserve 5 stars. This is even more stupid considering how all of em accepted MC's story, given the fact that luffy is supposed to be smarted [ as u stated ] and that they should be suspicious but no...in less than an hour they accepted him into a crew and gave him a OP DF just like that,,,barely any CD...then theres the DF,,,extremely forced,,,seems highly situational So just cause if these two reason story shouldnt get 5 stars,,,The CD and SD are barely here [ SD fine the starting paragraph until MC goes to OP world, after that its trash] so why have u ignored it and given 5 stars??

amaturewriter:5 stars for CD? Really? MC acted with strawhats as though they knew each other for days, when it was barely an hour,,,and they accepted everything like that...extremely stupid...and if u compare the OG strawhats do remember that each had arcs OR minor arcs which were extremely emotional in each arc and they all grew together, [zoro, with freedom, sanji protection, nami freedom, chopper saved life, etc..] here MC just told a story,,,extremely forced,,clearly dosnt deserve 5 stars. This is even more stupid considering how all of em accepted MC's story, given the fact that luffy is supposed to be smarted [ as u stated ] and that they should be suspicious but no...in less than an hour they accepted him into a crew and gave him a OP DF just like that,,,barely any CD...then theres the DF,,,extremely forced,,,seems highly situational So just cause if these two reason story shouldnt get 5 stars,,,The CD and SD are barely here [ SD fine the starting paragraph until MC goes to OP world, after that its trash] so why have u ignored it and given 5 stars??

peter_spindler:I'll start of by saying that I've never said that luffy was smart, he's dumb as heck. But our mc is a smart luffy. He is really smart, very childish and does whatever to achieve his dream. If you watched one piece you would know that there are several places where the straw hats treat strangers as though they are close an example would be the foxy pirates who they party with as though they'd known each other forever. They did what they did cause he was going to die. They listened to his story and decided that he had been through and finally achieved his dream so they decided to show him what they could of the world while they had the time. Hence the df which BTW they would probably find again since after the user dies it goes to a close by fruit. And yes the situation seems very situational. It is. But I think it's cool and a good excuse to introduce the mcs powers later

peter_spindler:I'll start of by saying that I've never said that luffy was smart, he's dumb as heck. But our mc is a smart luffy. He is really smart, very childish and does whatever to achieve his dream. If you watched one piece you would know that there are several places where the straw hats treat strangers as though they are close an example would be the foxy pirates who they party with as though they'd known each other forever. They did what they did cause he was going to die. They listened to his story and decided that he had been through and finally achieved his dream so they decided to show him what they could of the world while they had the time. Hence the df which BTW they would probably find again since after the user dies it goes to a close by fruit. And yes the situation seems very situational. It is. But I think it's cool and a good excuse to introduce the mcs powers later

amaturewriter:ahh see...u just ignored forced relationship and story development and just used this excuse... But I think it's cool and a good excuse to introduce the mcs powers later with the error I mentioned alone is enough for this story to not get 5/5...its rushed,,,extremely so and illogical,,but u ignored....something u did before..u ignore and u say its cool...

peter_spindler:I mean... I can't say anything if you deny the straw hats nature. I mean they are the most trusting people in that world

amaturewriter:And I cant say anything when u deny ur own logic and character development and story development and ignore rushed forced events.. now can I?...especially when u fail to see ur own contradictions like this He is really smart, very childish and does whatever to achieve his dream U ignore logic,,,proven and in my review

peter_spindler:What contradiction? Where did I deny my own logic. You gotta make these things more specific if you don't want to confuse me.

amaturewriter:if u fail to see it,,,I cant, cause seeing how u ignore everything and failed to see ur own contradiction, its pointless

amaturewriter:if u fail to see it,,,I cant, cause seeing how u ignore everything and failed to see ur own contradiction, its pointless

amaturewriter:if u fail to see it,,,I cant, cause seeing how u ignore everything and failed to see ur own contradiction, its pointless