Reviews of One Piece Adventure
One Piece Adventure
I_Am_Immortal
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Nice and realistic story, I like how the MC needs a wake up call as I always considered idiotic how all the Reincarnators decide to train relentlessly and become strong the moment they wake up, it's stupid, none of us first world people would start an harsh training regiment without having similar experiences before reincarnation or a concrete and urgent need for it, come on we all think that martial arts are cool as ****, but how many do actually start practicing them without abandoning after few moths at most?
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Started of good but know they basically have become monster. slapping little girls and shit and I like the merchant angle but he is a man with the king's haki who hides? like wtf. And he cant change the main plot? Barto club was in the main plot. what if he got his devil fruit from a pirate you killed.. Just saying it's good but if your going to made him a coward who cannot change anything.
MC is disgusting, he was letting his mother be ****ed by some random pirate, not only that, he is a 25 yes old reincarnated person that should know the cruelty of one piece world, but this disgusting disgrace to MCs sat on his ass for 2 yrs doing little to no physical exercise, cowarding in front of pirated that were about to r@pe his mother, this is the most disgusting ff on webnovel, author should feel shame on writing something as such just for character development that was nowhere to be seen. I say dodge it like a bullet of shiit
I dont like the beggining of the story at all. MC is a total idiot. Author decides having netorare, letting pirates almost raped her mother at the beggining of the story. Damn, should never had read it. Add Netorare tags, my goodness. Also whats with the simp personality, his a reincarnated individual, he was mentally older. Damn.
MC is a complete weakling. Then the author forces something dark and the mc is a weakling so cant do anything lol even though he shouldn’t be! Then later they start to act weak in front of people so they seem to be just common people. Like wtf? This isn’t some cliche cultivation world that they will kidnap your family after you beat them when you are literally so far from home and many people could have similar to the same names lol waste of time.
Yea so there is one problem with this book, the main character. I normally wouldn't complain about the mc since i already see them often called cucks, cowards and many other exaggerated descriptions. But this is the first book i've read where the mc is WORTHLESS, in theory he reincarnated from being 25 but he actually acts like a child. Scared of pirates, to scared to train himself with simulated combat and too lazy to train himself with weights. And then IN THE WORLD OF ONE PIECE he is surprised when things go wrong and he cant do anything. I wouldn't even complain about the mc being a coward or lazy because that is the writer's choice to have that kind of mc. But I will not read a book where the main character who is supposedly 25 and know's one piece is scared when pirates show up and has to be soothed by his mother and who cant even think up a good plan for them to escape. Basically i gave it a 1 in all category simple because the main character is worthless in every way imaginable.
Another author failing to grasp dark does not equal deep. Your main character has all the tools required to pursue personal strength but does not do so in the slightest. You could have had him just train for an hour a day and still have all scenes play out the same way, with the difference being the MC doesn't come across as arrogant and self indolgent. The cliche advice thrown around for new writers is show don't tell, which is the exact problem with this fiction. You say he cares about his mother, but none of his actions lead the audience to believe that. By placing zero effort into protecting his own life and by extension those around him he has shown the value he places in them, zero. This would all be perfectly fine if the character was 5, they're not however and as such your character comes off as aggressively unlikable. It's okay to have dark serious themes in a fandom that doesn't traditionally see too much of it, however this should not be at the cost of the rational thought of the protagonist. You don't need to make the choice the audience wants but it needs to be one they can see themselves making in the situation to be relatable, and your MC has not done that.
I don't know what to say but this is the greatest one piece fanfic ever, furthermore, I hope you never stop writing cause you got talent man and I promise that I will always give you my absolute support as long as you keep this level of quality over quantity so don't rush it even though it hurts me more. Ps. I hope it becomes a romance novel than a harem novel I'm tired of it and y'all horny guys can look it up elsewhere but here, if not the author has something to say about it :(
the reason people who are described in this type of situation usually train like crazy is simple and realistic, because they want to guarantee their SURVIVAL. crazy is to know that if you are in such a dangerous world and do nothing to try to have ways to react if something goes wrong, even more if you receive gifts as a body that has no growth limits, we as a highly adaptable race are capable you can believe in changing from the lazy to the fighters, the excuse is stupid that just because the training is difficult you give up, maybe that in a peaceful world or in a situation that is not in danger focuses on something reasonable, but in a world that can literally screw with you and those you like to simply continue a restful life would be idiotic.
