the way you go by people's journals is annoying. it is shit and it is a way to make it sound more interesting when it is not. bad bad bad

such a great fanfiction. love how the mc get his own set of powers and own thoughts. not really just a follow along. make make it so he connects to the earth and can control it to a degree. kind got the whole druid thing going.

I know you have just started by I have been impressed. even your original character is fitting in well with his own set of powers. I also like how your not afraid to change things. already waiting for the next chapter. t

The Ultron AI is just crazy. his 10 year old Astro Boy whipping with stark thing was probs the only thing worth reading in this book. so don't get your hopes up

you can make it fluer of I love that realtionship and they should be together. I am not really a harem person so maybe just one person or two please

Started of good but know they basically have become monster. slapping little girls and shit and I like the merchant angle but he is a man with the king's haki who hides? like wtf. And he cant change the main plot? Barto club was in the main plot. what if he got his devil fruit from a pirate you killed.. Just saying it's good but if your going to made him a coward who cannot change anything.

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