Crown_of_Flame
This book was the break my mind needed for the past year and a half. As I read your work, the genuineness in your descriptions and the images that were projected in my mind as you strung me along were like that first sip of lemonade on a hot day. Thank you for writing this story. There were some minor errors but these should be eradicated as you read more and self-growth occurs; a natural process which you shouldn't worry about. The transition from description to character-driven action as the story went along was marvelous - the cherry on top of the well baked cake. You've got something that I cannot wait to see flourish!
This story honestly reminds me of my first love back in High school which is a great thing! You get a lot of those sweet butterfly moments mixed with that "hotness overload" which I am all about. There are a few typos and some placement of asterisk description that can be written out but the writing is still cohesive. All-in-all my dear author, you are heading on a pretty stellar start. Don't stop. Tell your story!
The flow of the story is very calming to read. A well-written story about high school and first love where the main character Layla leaves you wanting to read on to see her success even further. It was my first time reading and I really enjoyed the start of the story and will like to see how far ML and FL go...I also love that the characters have distinctive voices. The writing style is new to me but it was still captivating. As the story continues, the more I was able to understand and be drawn in with the plot. Well done author.
After just several chapters this story managed to hook me up and make me so curious to find out what happens next 😍 The language is very nice and flowy, it reveals just enough information without seeming clogged or heavy, and the characters are so well fleshed out. From just a few chapters you can get a sense of their personality which is great! The author really did an amazing job with setting the beginning of the story. I will definitely continue reading this story and recommend it to others as well! Keep up the good work author! 🥰
It's a story that would remind you of young love and crushes during High School. That young naïve love lol anyways... the story was extremely well written, the character developments were slowly progressing into the character that the author wans to portray to us. I don't have any complains when it comes to the world building... there's still a lot to anticipate to this story so I'll definitely cheer for you author-nim!
As of the latest release, my biggest praise for this book is how the author improved their writing style. While some very small issues that I have pointed out in comments remain, the chapters are much more flowy and smooth to read through in the latest updates. I don't usually read the contemporary romance genre and it might not be my cup of tea, but this was a pleasant read and will remain in my library. I'm looking forward to seeing more interaction between the FL and ML and how your writing quality is taken up a notch further. Keep up the good work~~
I am writing this review a little early because I promised a review way back but I been so busy. From what I've read this books sounds very interesting, and I love how calming the chapters are. I can just sit, and read while drinking a cup of coffee, which is a plus for me! I really like the way the author set up the characters. they all are very interesting even from the start. I can't wait to see where this goes.
A promising plot archetype, I must say. However, there are a few issues you should pay attention to. Characters are a bit unreal and have no clear motivation. The characters are stiff without a voice of their own. The series of events are really unnecessary to plot development and could have been cut out. Grammar is a main issues and the switch from present and past tenses can pull readers out of the story. POV isn't clearly established. Another point is setting. It is very vague and unclear. Best wishes and keep writing!