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I started reading this novel as an exchange in reviews. I'm certainly glad I took the time, the story is interesting even if the amount of chapters leaves me wanting more. The quality and english used is of superb calibre and I must applaud both the writer and his editor for that. The characters show a good build-up in character although there is a lack of depth, yet this is mostly due to the lack of current chapters. The world building is interesting and leaves one wondering what the future will hold for this fic. I will update this review sometime in the future when There are more chapters for me to feast my eyes on. For now I would advise people to read the fiction, It is worth your time!
*Remember: this review is based on the first five chapters.* Constructive Criticism: I'd suggest that with your constant scene changes you make sure that when the focus character changes, that you state who the focus character is... I got a little confused with the only thing to go on being the time the events were taking place.;,;. Positive Feedback: You seem like some sort of professional writer with the quality of the plot, character build, and background. Also, your grammar and structure are well done.;,;. Personal Feedback: I did as promised and read this novel to review it. I'm sorry but the story holds no interest to me so I'm discontinuing it here... Keep up the effort and satisfy the fans you have the best you can.;,;.
Absolutely worth reading! Fun mix of plot concepts... contemplative but not deep. Then action! The one thing that missing sometimes is scene background and description. Hard to follow or visualize the scene. But who cares when we get such fun characters! Sia will slowly win you over, though she's an airhead at times. And I can't wait to see Ika in action again. Give this one a try.
The writing quality is smooth and engaging, it's a very good read! The author updates enough to keep things moving, and the story's development is perfectly paced and sensical. Character design...I want to see more and more of Sia, I hope there's a lot a lot of chapters to come. Sia is like an accidental but still somehow kickbutt hero. It's an interesting way to have a character, and the author pulls it off flawlessly. I'd give Character Design 10 stars if I could. World Background is good too, I gave it 4 out of 5 because I know there's still more development to be done. It's a really good read overall, if you're looking for a story like suede, this is the one.
The writing style here is really creative and unique, while the story has a nice tempo to it-- all in the present tense. So it feels like you're right in the moment with the characters. It's really refreshing. I think the story and character development needs some work, but it's really pulling together with the more chapters that come out. Good world building too! Also, the author seems to be putting out a lot of chapters in a short span of time, so looking forward to making this one of my usuals!
Surprisingly ****** but deep cover picture and title... You have my stars.... Wont read till it has 30 chap since i has seen many originals dropped before that mark... So keep up da good work! .. .. .. 140 words 140 words 140 words 140 words 140 words 140 words 140 words 140 words 140 words 140 words 140 words 140 words 140 words 140 words 140 words.... Qidian!!! Clean up your review system!!!!! Why must I YOUR GRANDMOTHER write a 140 words just to review? What is this school essay??!
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