Otsutsuki_D_Isaiah
Couldn’t continue. MC is just gonna baby sit characters from the way it’s going. Mc says ‘don’t worry Harry, I will help you with your fate’ Seems like author is obsessed with hermione as well. Mc so worried about her that he plans on telling her parents about the dangers of the magical world. Like you might as well do that for every muggle born. The grammar is also not so good.... the words just don’t flow nicely
First, if you are going to copy and paste into the story from other sources that are in perfect English then clean up your trashy engrish. There are plenty of online programs for free that will fix your issue, it just makes the story look and read like crap..... perfect English that makes sense then the next paragraph its crappy engrish that makes no sense, so clean it up. Next, the mc is an idiot, he wants to help everyone, dumbestt idea ever for HP fic, you either join the bandwagon of the hp or you control it and take everything yourself. The mc knows where all the cruxes are, get them and take to the gobs to get everything removed and you have solved 1 issue and got some good loot. Take the stone, you know it's there get it dont even need to go just go to THAT room and have it summoned there and get the stone out of the mirror and stop playing with hp your mc will never rule if he associates with hp
Definitely quite interesting and intriguing with the whole Master of Fate and having The Fate Wand among other stuff in a way that just like the Peverell have and are centered around The Deathly Hollows The Fatum will be of Fate not to mention all the training and practice OC did and the founders teaching and talking to them overall I have enjoyed reading this book it's truly different from the other Harry Potter books not to mention having his own world inside of the ring like a ring dimension but also having different kinds of creatures as well different exotic plants is quite interesting look forward to reading more of this book and can't wait for when ur able to get the chance to continue on with this book
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