Review Detail of Brezer in Changing Fate(Harry Potter World)

First, if you are going to copy and paste into the story from other sources that are in perfect English then clean up your trashy engrish. There are plenty of online programs for free that will fix your issue, it just makes the story look and read like crap..... perfect English that makes sense then the next paragraph its crappy engrish that makes no sense, so clean it up. Next, the mc is an idiot, he wants to help everyone, dumbestt idea ever for HP fic, you either join the bandwagon of the hp or you control it and take everything yourself. The mc knows where all the cruxes are, get them and take to the gobs to get everything removed and you have solved 1 issue and got some good loot. Take the stone, you know it's there get it dont even need to go just go to THAT room and have it summoned there and get the stone out of the mirror and stop playing with hp your mc will never rule if he associates with hp