saintbear
Hi. It's your neighbor. I've read just 1 1/2 chapters because I'm in a rush. It's interesting. You lost me not because of the 'prologue' but because something is very confusing and 'lacking' in the middle of Chapter 2. Also, add spaces between the paragraphs to make the reading flow smoothly. It's a good trick to keep your readers reading. Your synopsis needs to reveal a bit more to caught the reader's attention. The cover is not stimulating enough, it's static and your story isn't. I like your writing style. You show, don't tell. It's gold. Good luck.
honestly the book has so much potential! it was pretty interesting as well because the protagonist has the same name as my male lead in spirity so i was more than happy to have read the story out. i could only say that perhaps the paragraphs could be broken into several smaller paragraphs since most WN readers use the app and it could get confusing to read long paragraphs on such tiny screens. the book cover could use a change since the novel actually has lots of action going on. kudos to the author and i hope your novel rise up!
Ok, first of, this genre is one of my favorites and i could easily say that you managed to pull it off splendidly. I love Will's personality in everyway of course. A city filled with crime and corruption and then you have your super chill and cool main character right in the middle of the chaos. Oof- and the twisting point that came. Yep a fan. Apart from this i think your writing quality was incredibly balanced with the story. Also, the way everything is describes makes a person imagine quite vividly. I like this story deeply and I will definitely add it in my library. :D
Dear author, don't you DARE give up on this story! It's a warningđ So, it's been the first three chapters I have read, but I am already dropping a review. Too soon, you think? Then you have not stumbled upon this beautifully crafted-lettered imagination. You! Yes you reading this, I urge you to read just the prologue and I can assure you that you won't regret picking up this book. Let's support this one as much as we can, I would love to see it get to the top. Let's do so alright! You did a great job, author. Keep up the good work [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
This book is a gem, especially the atmosphere was greatly done through the writing. I dont know how to explain it but you can feel the somber tone in this. The writing is simple but at the same time beautiful, I keep getting sucked into the story and the writing conveys the plot perfectly. The characters are also not flat but fleshed out. I can really feel what William is going through and experience it with him. The chapters are easy to read through and in no time youre finished and crave for more. Only thing I have to say, is that the switches between the tenses takes you a bit out of the experience but with a bit of editing, this is no problem anymore. Honestly, give this a try and you'll love it!