KaGen
Loving your story brother! The story has excellent plot twists, you will definitely get more attention if you wait a little- But, I hope your work definitely gets what it deserves! As a narrative- your story is finely carved, and it craves the reader to keep reading![img=update][img=update][img=update]
This story is good and I like that you gave terminology. This could be a hidden gem. But, there are grammar problems. Fragment sentences, missing punctuations, unclear wording, and some unneeded capitalization. I did see two contractions that I don’t think exist. Other than that, if you fix those mistakes, there will be something good here. Keep up the good work!
This story is very nice in terms of character design and world background building. writer has very wide imagenation and is good at discription. The story and write has good potential. As story start to develop it will hook your intrest in it. All the characters are designed very careful and amazingly. Writer's updating stability is good. There sill chance in writing quality but that can be just neglect for now. Author can improve it in time. Overall I like the story. Give it a try.