Jyojiko
Leaving a review because WHY NOT!? The story is good! 🥰 Writing quality: I like how I could see the improvement of the author overtime! 🤩 In the first chapters, you could see some struggles in narration but as you go, the improvements are evidently seen by the use of appropriate vocabularies, enhanced grammar, and creative usage of figures of speeches! 🤩 Applause! Update stability is given—I could see the continuous efforts of the author to continue updating for the story despite the busy schedule! 😉 Story development is good! The way the plot flows is not too fast and not too slow as well! 🤩 The author has done well in doing the balance—making sure that the readers will be entertained as well! Great job! 💪 Character design is one thing I appreciate in this story. As we go along, you would see the development of her characters! I love Dana’s improvement—giving me the concept of luctur et emergo! 😍 World background—I have nothing more to say than the author preparing great research and build up before and during her days of writing and continuing this story. 😘 Overall, this would be a great read! I know that her upcoming stories would be interesting—maybe even far off better than this one! 💪 Keep up the great and awesome work, Jyojiko! 🥳
Early review to show support to the lovely author for a wonderful story. Although it is very difficult to comment on the story plot as of now, the synopsis is really catchy. It is short yet very well explained and to the point. I am loving the story so far and Dana's character is really lovable. The narration is perfect and the author successfully delivered the context of the plot. I really felt the aura of being in my teenage days. It is relatable to real life and can see myself in most of the scenes. I am looking forward for the story to unfold and see how she celebrates her 18th Birthday. Kudos... :) To improve: * You can break the lengthy paragraphs into smaller ones for a better understanding (reader's perspective.) * You need to proofread your chapters as minute errors are seen which are actually not interrupting the chapters.
I liked how the characters' personality are easily visualised. The conversation topic touched are also highly likely to happen and is also a good aid for people who are still at a loss of what to do with their life. It really hits home. On a separate note... You really love Shanghai and the word "capture", huh. 😂
I seldom leave reviews but here I am since I really like this story. Also, not a big fan of this genre but I am amazed on the character visualization and the effort to incorporate different cultural background. Usually, I read the novels after a considerable chapters was already updated but this one is a gem 💎and I'm definitely hooked. 😍😍😍
I like it so far. It's got the potential, I mean. Your plot is nice and interesting. Your writing is great and I like the main character. But hell, I can't wait for what's going to happen next you know? What if things don't turn out the way the main character wants or something like that? I love it!