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Readoholic
ReadoholicLv103yrReadoholic

Early review to show support to the lovely author for a wonderful story. Although it is very difficult to comment on the story plot as of now, the synopsis is really catchy. It is short yet very well explained and to the point. I am loving the story so far and Dana's character is really lovable. The narration is perfect and the author successfully delivered the context of the plot. I really felt the aura of being in my teenage days. It is relatable to real life and can see myself in most of the scenes. I am looking forward for the story to unfold and see how she celebrates her 18th Birthday. Kudos... :) To improve: * You can break the lengthy paragraphs into smaller ones for a better understanding (reader's perspective.) * You need to proofread your chapters as minute errors are seen which are actually not interrupting the chapters.

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Capture The Elusive Mandarin

Jyojiko

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Jyojiko
JyojikoAuthorJyojiko

THANK YOU!!! Will take note of all the parts you pointed out as I go along with Dana's story. I also don't know where it will go. I let my MC take me wherever. hahaha I really appreciate your perspective as I'm scared to change much of what is already written as I feel I will ruin the character.