lucabear
The setting for Zephyria reminded me of Laputa. It's a rather interesting setting for this story. Hikari is such a laidback, shounen manga ML-like character and Gale is on the competitive side of the spectrum. The premise of the story was well established, so it became an easy read! This is a really good read and I would like to subscribe to see the escapades of the star knights as a whole! Please continue writing! You are a very creative writer: :) In terms of the technicalities in writing, I don't really mind if it's purposefully awkward. However, outside of the parenthesis (which I presumed are your comments) there are some sentences that confuses me on whether this is in first-person or third-person. There are also some grammatical errors, but those are things that you can easily proofread. I suggest that you go over your draft before publishing because there are some evident, accidental mistakes. I'm sorry for my long review! These are merely constructive criticisms. I did not write it out of spite :)
a short yet captivating first chapter. im immersed in a story with depth - a starting point for conflict within the city, an authentic world and three compelling characters. it has a great narrative voice; im left with a sense of mystery. what did they go through to make them “ready”? what stories did they hear about down below? im excited to see the unfolding of this story; it has striking potential :) it would’ve be great to see finer details about zephyria but im sure there is more to come!
Writing quality is decent, there is a bit of outlining which is great. 20 chapters in a day is amazing, but you should've made it a consistent release with at least a chapter per day to gather more readers. Grammatical errors are kept minimum if not close to none (I just woke up so I don't know if my eyes auto-corrected stuff or not). If you want to read a laid-back story or a change of pace, this will be a good read for you.
I could see author did a great in description part. I will definitely add it to my library and read it to the end. The plot was unique and immediately piqued my Interest. The story development was also well in pace. Not too fast nor not too slow. I could feel the author's unique writing style and I liked it.Author did a great job in describing scenarios.All in all author did a great job and looking forward to read more.This story got some potential and I would definitely recommended it to my friends. I will definitely give 5/5 to encourage author and for his/her hardwork.
Wow, this story reminds me of Laputa. You know, Laputa In The Sky? It's a popular anime in Japan, just me being a weeb, I guess? Interesting premise at the first chapter👍👍👍,I like it!!! The pacing is not that slow and fast, something you can dive in your own pace! All of the characters are nicely written, keep up the good work my fellow author😉😉😉
This book has an unusual, yet an attractive setting. Though this is not the kind of book I usually read, I like the author's writing style. It is different in its own way. The character design and the background development is neat, though it was confusing at first glance. It is clearly visible the author has done a lot of hard work in creating the story and I appreciate the effort. This is a very creative book and a good read for those who are seeking a change from their usual reads. Keep up the good work author.