Shaikh_Tohaa
Sorry for the ones who want this story to be a harem because I am not going to make it something like that but I will, of course, try to make it a good love story and there might be more than one girl for me but that will depend. Also, the story will be concentrated more on action than anything else and sometimes a slice of life with full of fun as the story progresses on. One last thing my English is not good enough. So don't read if you can't understand but If you continue reading than tell me which part you are unable to read in your comment and I will try my best to fix that part of the story. Thank you for reading.
The idea behind the story is good. But a lot of editing is necessary. The English quality us very bad and sometimes it is hard to read. The narration is also too rushed and lacks personality. And please use punctuation!! It's making me breathless. The main character is so confusing. His personality is quite plain. Textbook like. And sometimes too forced. As for the story development and world background there is nothing to say. It okay. But the story is worth it. It has potential. Continue to improve yourself Lord Author and thank you for the story.
It`s chapter number 26 and he still is not a genin. I guess Kirito-san lost all his skills after reincarnation, no beater anymore (Yeah i know it`s not Kirigaya-kun, but it`s fair for me, duh). Despite that, the story is very interesting and it oppend my eyes to some crimes of Grin.. Hiruzen. And don`t drop it pls. Are we good? ... Yes? ... Yes :)))
Quite a good read but not the quality you would expect for a novel with 4.5 rating. The text needs a bit of editing and the writing format needs to be fixed. Reading it almost made me sleepy. The character of the mc also needs to be expanded cuz he felt really boring to read. Good story premise and idea though. The author should've made things more interesting and less boring. Honestly, this fanfic felt like a raft joined together by a single rope. The ideas are too scattered and not connected with each other. The story progression feels forced sometimes as a result. It's as if the author never had the outline of the story in mind and it was written by spontaneous bursts of inspiration and joined together poorly. I'd say that the quality of the story would be between 3.0 - 3.5 stars.