monotone and boring narration. no storytelling.
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Mind explaining your point further, I asked about this in the chapter you left the comment in and you didn’t reply
well i read till ch 47 and nothing happening. no plot. things just happening. he made that technique, he made this technique... few line of dialogue without purpose (slice of life like) and again he make this technique, he make that technique. maybe all these chapters are just preparatory work, so that later the incredible development of the plot will shoot out. But all this is just boring to read. dialogues are really empty, might as well just delete them and nothing will change (try it - take the draft out, delete dialogue parts and see how it reads).
ThePpp_Pppp:Mind explaining your point further, I asked about this in the chapter you left the comment in and you didn’t reply
and one more thing that you need to ask yourself and give answer that make sense for you and readers - why mc doing what he is doing
M_Static:well i read till ch 47 and nothing happening. no plot. things just happening. he made that technique, he made this technique... few line of dialogue without purpose (slice of life like) and again he make this technique, he make that technique. maybe all these chapters are just preparatory work, so that later the incredible development of the plot will shoot out. But all this is just boring to read. dialogues are really empty, might as well just delete them and nothing will change (try it - take the draft out, delete dialogue parts and see how it reads).
who is in the pairing I was planning to read if it's maki pairing?
M_Static:well i read till ch 47 and nothing happening. no plot. things just happening. he made that technique, he made this technique... few line of dialogue without purpose (slice of life like) and again he make this technique, he make that technique. maybe all these chapters are just preparatory work, so that later the incredible development of the plot will shoot out. But all this is just boring to read. dialogues are really empty, might as well just delete them and nothing will change (try it - take the draft out, delete dialogue parts and see how it reads).
