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2022-12-09 14:01

not good, contradicts alot of things through out story, no depth in romance or kingdom building or well story plot in general, need proof reading i mean like "she was mad and couldnt continue eating so she stopped talking and continued eating" and this type of writing continues to happen alot throughout the story

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