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Lucy_Carla
Lucy_CarlaLv43yr
2021-08-31 23:56

1.personally i dont like natasha as (candidate) heroine, 2. i dont like a jerk system (give prank, etc) 3. punishment part make it like a slave system ..........,...................................................,...................................................,........................................

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Alcoholic_Panda
Alcoholic_PandaAuthor

everyone is free to have their own opinion, i did say this is my first fic, and that there will be mistakes

MajesterSmith
MajesterSmithLv4

Unwept_Writer
Unwept_WriterLv5

You are fine Just keep writing what you want i love the book

Alcoholic_Panda:everyone is free to have their own opinion, i did say this is my first fic, and that there will be mistakes
WebReaderPub
WebReaderPubLv14

system without punishment part are too broken, thought task should be the product of Mc choice. this is my opinio of what a system novel should be

Lucy_Carla
Lucy_CarlaLv4

not really... for exmpl : 1. make reward less valuable, 2. dont do it often, 3. give some task time limit, if mc cannot completed task, he already waste time and efford, 4. most online game give task/quest without punishment but that doesnt make player broken, why ?. there so many way for make it not too broken...

WebReaderPub:system without punishment part are too broken, thought task should be the product of Mc choice. this is my opinio of what a system novel should be
KingParadox
KingParadoxLv1

I agree that a system needs punishment commensurate with the reward but it has to have the option to accept or reject the mission otherwise you are just a slave.

WebReaderPub:system without punishment part are too broken, thought task should be the product of Mc choice. this is my opinio of what a system novel should be
newthings
newthingsLv6

natasha is overused and boring, so much that have to see the movies once again to see here real character lol

ProfessorofCulture
ProfessorofCultureLv14

harem?

Alcoholic_Panda:everyone is free to have their own opinion, i did say this is my first fic, and that there will be mistakes
Insane_Pumpkin
Insane_PumpkinLv10

Well sad for you the system dosen't actually have punishments, it was a trick of the managment to ship MC and Natasha.

KingParadox:I agree that a system needs punishment commensurate with the reward but it has to have the option to accept or reject the mission otherwise you are just a slave.
Insane_Pumpkin
Insane_PumpkinLv10

Well the system dosen't actually have punishments, it was a trick of the managment to ship MC and Natasha.

WebReaderPub:system without punishment part are too broken, thought task should be the product of Mc choice. this is my opinio of what a system novel should be
Insane_Pumpkin
Insane_PumpkinLv10

1. Is a preference. 2. It was obvious the moment the managment (behind the scenes) appeared that it will be this kind of system. 3. The system dosen't actually have punishments, it was a trick of the managment to ship MC and Natasha.

Lucy_Carla
Lucy_CarlaLv4

1. there reason for that, few reason: she no longer "black widow" if she decide settle in relationship, i dont think "housewife" job will make her "spy agent" job easier. etc 2. then i dont like the managment (behind scene), if you like, go ahead, but i think mc not become system plaything is better. 3. so that punishment is not Real ? a Fake ? or it just another Prank ? why dont we let Mc reject it or deliberate fail it and see if that punishment is real or not ?

Insane_Pumpkin:1. Is a preference. 2. It was obvious the moment the managment (behind the scenes) appeared that it will be this kind of system. 3. The system dosen't actually have punishments, it was a trick of the managment to ship MC and Natasha.
Star_Dust_5798
Star_Dust_5798Lv3

arekuruutento
arekuruutentoLv12

so is I harem?, or just Natasha, I'm trying to read but can't, cuz I don't know if it's harem or not.

Lucy_Carla:1. there reason for that, few reason: she no longer "black widow" if she decide settle in relationship, i dont think "housewife" job will make her "spy agent" job easier. etc 2. then i dont like the managment (behind scene), if you like, go ahead, but i think mc not become system plaything is better. 3. so that punishment is not Real ? a Fake ? or it just another Prank ? why dont we let Mc reject it or deliberate fail it and see if that punishment is real or not ?
Bad_news
Bad_newsLv1

Natascha best agent

Alcoholic_Panda:everyone is free to have their own opinion, i did say this is my first fic, and that there will be mistakes
Darwin111111
Darwin111111Lv4

And the MC knows? No. That's why it doesn't matter if there would be no punishment. It's like not paying for a kidnapped family member because you think there was no punishment... just that it's your life instead of someone else's

Insane_Pumpkin:Well the system dosen't actually have punishments, it was a trick of the managment to ship MC and Natasha.
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Masterofall1
Masterofall1Lv14

The other elements of the story just bend to the main character's plans, there has been no real challenge for the main character no real challenge or no real conflict when everything is 'planned out' by the main character and goes exactly how the main character plans. Examples; 1. The ancient one, even if she couldn't see the main character's future, would still be wary of the main character for being a god's puppet, and she would at the very least demand that he does not harm the Earth, and even then it's a major stretch that she would teach him magic, she would most likely see him as a threat to the earth and eliminate him then and there, just for being connected to a 'patron god'. 2. The whole entire scenario with the black widow is just one whole pile of plot convenience BS, first off SHIELD didn't recruit black widow at all in fact they were hunting her and trying to kill her, and while yes it's entirely possible for SHIELD to try and brainwash her or use her trauma to manipulate her, it's harder because she can know the signs of brainwashing from the red room, and even then the delivery for such a plot development could have gone over a lot better if implemented at a slower pace, not just 'Oh, by the way, I noticed you're still brainwashed, yeah let me just get rid of that brainwashing and then add my own brainwashing to make you 'fall' for me. Now let's mention the main character design, honestly everything the main character does is defined as the typical manipulative, power-hungry fool, that everything just falls into his lap. Honestly, it's probably better if this was a cultivation novel at this point, it's that bad. At least with a cultivation novel, you can use the excuse of 'oh the heavens are smiling upon me' or 'I've been blessed by the heavens'.

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