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tyr12345
tyr12345Lv42yr
2021-12-22 02:21

The story is honestly getting boring. After 110 chapters the story still hasnt progressed to the main part. The mc is still 4 years old. Much time is wasted by explaining his daily life or just some random item he finds, that arent really good. The plot would be really good if the author would reduce it to the important encounters. For example 4 chapters were used to describe the mc going to the beach and describing the pokemon that life there (just marills,…)

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ErozothDraeor
ErozothDraeorLv6

Wow, 110 chapters and still age 4? I can only believe since its so weird. "Slow burn" Authors use that as an excuse. I don't care if this novel actually ends with 1000 chapter or more no way I'm reading that. Thanks for the review, the others complaining about info dump weren't really a turn off but this? hard pass.

Beast_Mode_7653
Beast_Mode_7653Lv1

Bro I hate novels like these but chapter 100 and mc still 4? This a new type of fan fic, author said it would be slow paced but I thought mc would start his journey at chapter 50 or 60. Dam, you just saved me hours of reading.

DarkD
DarkDLv14

Slow paced is one thing, 100 chapters and still age 4 is completely different. I like slow paced in fact. But I've come to hate novels that start the protagonist off as a baby. There's one fiction I remember reading that turned me off forever on them. It basically had a baby beating down fully grown knights by the age of two and I've been scared stiff ever since.

Wade_Evans_6510
Wade_Evans_6510Lv3

Honestly this story makes it work

Damian0481
Damian0481Lv13

indeed im at chapter 467 and the guy is 12 xd

white_poison
white_poisonLv4

when he start journey

Damian0481:indeed im at chapter 467 and the guy is 12 xd
XingTong
XingTongLv1

Cuando lleguemos al capítulo 1000 :)

white_poison:when he start journey
viksod
viksodLv4

I dont remember what chapter but its around chapter 600

white_poison:when he start journey
Ofensywny_Cioban
Ofensywny_CiobanLv13

Im glad i read your reviev before reading i checked and at chapter 665 there is first gym battle. im gonna pass on this one. The pokemon Timeless Journey is the best pokemon fanfic

AlastorGF
AlastorGFLv1

no voy a leer 600 capítulos para empezar a ver el comienzo de su viaje, estoy muy agradecido con vos por salvarme

viksod:I dont remember what chapter but its around chapter 600
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Notfriendsftw
NotfriendsftwLv4

overall thoughts: It's incredibly mid (mediocre) (in debth review) -(criticism) as of 550, his writing seems to be allergic to providing details and gives too much information at the same time. he is lazy in his use of adding other fictional characters and every character has no complexity. the mentor characters are benevolent powerful characters that are entirely selfless and talk the same way as each other. selflessness is a common theme among characters. the author babies you in general throughout the book. everyone of his characters falls into either 1. it's the cut and paste mc but with a different appearance. or 2. they are a shallow ghost of a character. often the author will repeat the same things over and over. the pokemon training times are inconsistent. the parents trained new pokemon faster than the years when they were on their journey, their improvement got close to, if not, rivaled mc's pokemon training time with his space. the dialog is rather terrible, people talk too much in one go and the responses are generalized. the dialog doesn't flow and the characters are unnatural when speaking. some of the dialog really made me cringe with how unnatural the actions taken were the author doesn't understand and underestimates intelligence and so the main character is of above average intelligence in the clothes of borderline genius. the system gives out too much unnecessary information. the mc has no had any conflicts that trully gave him pause (compliments) author did a great job in not being terrible, many novels made by amateur novelists are cringe and hard to read, not the case here. I didn't have to think overly hard while reading. a lot of the decisions the main character makes actually make sense. the author seems to know what he wants out of his story. the best part of all is the fact the author hasn't lost motivation to write which is admirable. (improvements) add comparisons, they will help give a visualization to the reader. streamline the system info, to much info becomes monotonous to read. don't list measurements, use comparisons, let us use our imagination read up on intelligence, the way you sell your character is smarter than you have shown us. show don't tell, people don't like to be babied so you provide clues on instead of outright giving away everything. the dialog needs to flow and become more natural. ease up with pleasantries and spelling when writing informal speech, not everyone pronounces full words. people will play with words that go beyond what is proper. people are complex. motivations differ, surprise shows differently on people, people go through combinations of emotions. you need to separate your characters personality . their personality are too close to each other. give your mc something/ someone to struggle with, a roadblock of some kind. there is nothing to push the story in an interesting direction. keep consistency with the timings.

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