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Sanjay2004
Sanjay2004Lv43yr
2021-08-04 04:45

One of the best pokemon fanfic I have ever seen have potential to be the no1 pokemon fanfic if the story continues as it is & an increase in updates.Waiting for more

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Copy_Ninja
Copy_NinjaLv11

can you recommend me some good Pokemon fanfictions? thank you

Quidanstealsnovels
QuidanstealsnovelsLv10

Ive checked the chapter list. Chapter 66, '4th birthday' is that for real? Is that nearly 70 chapters in and the MC isnt even 4? Theres slow paced and theres milking it. I assume its just a massive info dumps to get to there? What can you write about when they're 4.

Fafnir30Alseif
Fafnir30AlseifLv4

Really good novel if not a bit too slow but i like the story no Major plot hole really well thought storyline and grat amount of fun reading it. i would simply like to point out that not to forget his aura/psychic training and other side jobs otherwise i would absolutely Recommend reading the novel hopefully we can get a little more of updates

MagnuS
MagnuSLv14

10 poke years= 30 human years. That's why it's taking so long

Quidanstealsnovels:Ive checked the chapter list. Chapter 66, '4th birthday' is that for real? Is that nearly 70 chapters in and the MC isnt even 4? Theres slow paced and theres milking it. I assume its just a massive info dumps to get to there? What can you write about when they're 4.
DriftingFantasy
DriftingFantasyLv13

I wish that the author will add breeding knowledge in his many Pokejobs in the future so his Pokemons can get the best nutrition from Pokeblocks and add helper type Pokemons in his team or space to help him just like Chansey line, Jigglypuff line, Audino, Comfey, Indeedee or other Psychic/Fairy type Pokemon that have high intelligence, humanoid shape and knows different healing moves like heal pulse and aromatherapy.

Fafnir30Alseif:Really good novel if not a bit too slow but i like the story no Major plot hole really well thought storyline and grat amount of fun reading it. i would simply like to point out that not to forget his aura/psychic training and other side jobs otherwise i would absolutely Recommend reading the novel hopefully we can get a little more of updates
MagnuS
MagnuSLv14

why humanoid shape?

DriftingFantasy:I wish that the author will add breeding knowledge in his many Pokejobs in the future so his Pokemons can get the best nutrition from Pokeblocks and add helper type Pokemons in his team or space to help him just like Chansey line, Jigglypuff line, Audino, Comfey, Indeedee or other Psychic/Fairy type Pokemon that have high intelligence, humanoid shape and knows different healing moves like heal pulse and aromatherapy.
Desire96
Desire96Lv3

I think he already started his journey technically at 2 only as he did catch pokemon...

Quidanstealsnovels:Ive checked the chapter list. Chapter 66, '4th birthday' is that for real? Is that nearly 70 chapters in and the MC isnt even 4? Theres slow paced and theres milking it. I assume its just a massive info dumps to get to there? What can you write about when they're 4.
Abinav_KR
Abinav_KRLv4

Have you decided on a single female lead or multiple female lead? please no harem I would really want to know if he would get a fated partner or something ???😄😅

Mihoy_minoy
Mihoy_minoyLv14

Has there been any romance or will it be added at some point?

Justin_Richardsn
Justin_RichardsnLv14

is this your first then cause it is not that good

Incognito_San
Incognito_SanLv3

Its a childs novel so no

Mihoy_minoy:Has there been any romance or will it be added at some point?
Other Reviews
Notfriendsftw
NotfriendsftwLv4

overall thoughts: It's incredibly mid (mediocre) (in debth review) -(criticism) as of 550, his writing seems to be allergic to providing details and gives too much information at the same time. he is lazy in his use of adding other fictional characters and every character has no complexity. the mentor characters are benevolent powerful characters that are entirely selfless and talk the same way as each other. selflessness is a common theme among characters. the author babies you in general throughout the book. everyone of his characters falls into either 1. it's the cut and paste mc but with a different appearance. or 2. they are a shallow ghost of a character. often the author will repeat the same things over and over. the pokemon training times are inconsistent. the parents trained new pokemon faster than the years when they were on their journey, their improvement got close to, if not, rivaled mc's pokemon training time with his space. the dialog is rather terrible, people talk too much in one go and the responses are generalized. the dialog doesn't flow and the characters are unnatural when speaking. some of the dialog really made me cringe with how unnatural the actions taken were the author doesn't understand and underestimates intelligence and so the main character is of above average intelligence in the clothes of borderline genius. the system gives out too much unnecessary information. the mc has no had any conflicts that trully gave him pause (compliments) author did a great job in not being terrible, many novels made by amateur novelists are cringe and hard to read, not the case here. I didn't have to think overly hard while reading. a lot of the decisions the main character makes actually make sense. the author seems to know what he wants out of his story. the best part of all is the fact the author hasn't lost motivation to write which is admirable. (improvements) add comparisons, they will help give a visualization to the reader. streamline the system info, to much info becomes monotonous to read. don't list measurements, use comparisons, let us use our imagination read up on intelligence, the way you sell your character is smarter than you have shown us. show don't tell, people don't like to be babied so you provide clues on instead of outright giving away everything. the dialog needs to flow and become more natural. ease up with pleasantries and spelling when writing informal speech, not everyone pronounces full words. people will play with words that go beyond what is proper. people are complex. motivations differ, surprise shows differently on people, people go through combinations of emotions. you need to separate your characters personality . their personality are too close to each other. give your mc something/ someone to struggle with, a roadblock of some kind. there is nothing to push the story in an interesting direction. keep consistency with the timings.

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