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Too repetitive, its become a slice of life fic that focuses on the MC's looks and superficial relationships and almost no chat room/multiverse and the story hasnt progressed for multiple chapters.

I'm starting to reach my limit with the behavior of the MC and how the story progresses.I'm going to name some things that I didn't like about the story. 1-The MC is pathetic, literally (and that comes from an h). Nothing more to say. 2-The progress of the story is "too" slow, so much so that I wouldn't be surprised if many skip chapters, simply to see the start of some mission of the dimensional chat group. 3-There is some other hole in the story that is simply not consistent. 4-I am completely sure that no member of the chat along with the MC progressed with the skills they obtained or have. I won't even mention the "change of history". 5- I will not even mention the expressions, communications, attitudes, etc. It's not the best I've seen but it's not the worst either, we just need to improve these parts and the story will be even more acceptable. There's more but I just don't feel like writing it all down. That's all I hope the author improves these things. Este es el puntaje que le doy a la historia. Lo cambiaré cuando vea un mejor progreso pero por ahora este es el puntaje.

Pretty good start and most categories of writing are decent, the only issue I have is when the MC becomes handsome and by that I mean so much so that after about the 4th chapter every other chapter is about how handsome he is or how much girls blush when they stare at him. I have nothing against handsomeness but it adds no substance when its mentioned for 9 chapters straight with no development or regular usage of the actual chat group

Anti 5 star bot spam. I could give a really huge and constructive review for the author to improve from but i'm too tired to list the huge issues that anyone with half a brain cell can see so imma just bullet point it. -MC is far too passive in everything, in terms of relationships and self progression. -Took 18 chapters and a whole three months for the story to actually begin on it's premise. (Dimensional chat group) -The author makes extreme ,borderline gay, descriptions of the MC's sculptured, chiselled and perfect body that puts gods to shame. So much so that every female within observable distance creams themselves. (Seriously half the book is a description of his abs or something similar) - Very repetitive and predictable/cliche. -Writing is decent. However, the writing is very sluggish and feels blocky(?). Potential to be a great book but ruined by a loser protagonist thats given everything on a platter and does nothing with it.

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I legit thought it was actually good yhen I read it. I was heavily disappointed. Read it and you'll find out why or read some other reviews.

Not shameless, but just extremely proud and excited about my own story~!! I have a lot already planned and I can't wait to put those ideas into the story and share it with you all~!!! Hope you enjoy~!!!

It’s confusing how someone can write a trash ff. Literally if you read other ff similar to this and aren’t dumb you can make a perfect one So how?

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The story development is so slow that it is mind-numbing the mc feels like a robot but lacks the smartness of one the amount of cringe before chapter 21 or so is horrendous, tone it down with "oh he is so handsome that it puts gods to shame" like stop its cringe And aika is just no and I don't remember her being genuinely into girls to the point that she is bi and the yuri you are setting up is a no, with the mc's weak and thin personality its more like he is a part of aika's harem and yuuji is just a dog that fetches the girls

Twenty chapters to use the group chat and half of that is about the protagonist and what Adonis is like, the author has a problem with that issue and needs to fix it later a rewrite.

Well, the story has several problems, the main one is the chat room, other than that they all have a broken power and are very intelligent. the subject of the chat is barely touched and the missions without mentioning that the choice of the members was terrible and we must stop mentioning the beauty of the protagonists and that which makes all women in heat already boring

So, I will say right away this fic is not about a chat group. this is waste of life for 1 normal chapter there are 12 empty chapters, each chapter says how beautiful the hero is. and the hero literally does nothing.

You should end with the mention of how beautiful your character is, it really seems like you have a complex, the companions are too charismatic and powerful and you can't capture their essence, you could also focus more on group chat.

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Author Bro I understand how you feel when you make a single chapter. First you have to gather information, create dialogues & scenario, than story & character development. Respect for author creating good kind of novel

I'm 18 chapters in and got to the first quest.. I'm so bored I don't even want to continue past that. Not to mention there are way to many characters to keep track off already. Last names aren't used to I can't even find out what anime they are from or if they are OCs for half of them. The slice of life of it all is good and all its just there's no action when there are action based worlds in chat. I just got bored. I'm pretty sure I skipped chapter also.

Honestly i look forward to seeing where this goes as a man of culture i believe im quite excited for "plot" if you know what i mean hehehe..