Transmigrated With A Time Chamber In DxD

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH As someone who have written a human centerd DxD fic, this is cap and drains your remaining braincells. put Low IQ tag next time

Its DBZ in DxD. He is human but its all DBZ moves and everything. That aint bad, but in terms of DxD it seems mostly just a plot to get Akeno, and maybe some other characters down the road. DxD wise its already not canon, Akeno and her family live in Kuoh, which either means her plot wont happen or the author doesnt know much about dxd....

different and fresh start along with some good wishes but,,,my interest went down with that absurd akeno plot and the forced fight,,,,maybe it will improve with time but mehh

typical giga chad that have more balls than brains. the type where he thinks he is baddass if he trains with weights for 40 years and doesn't speak with anyone. Good idea but poorly executed and...... still too easy and if this was this easy some gods or devils or etc... would grab humans make them train and prolong their life with immortal herbs, fruits, water etc... and brianwash them to fight for them or experiment on them. AND even more the entire idea that yahwe humans existed(ok maybe) but that they were so strong is riddicoulus many gods primodial beings devils would be tens of 1000x years older and they would thrash any trash human that trained 200 years. It doesn't add up. I would build the premis of this fanfic on the premise of underdog a weak human from the weakest race that only has steel like will unbreakable and is aware of his weakness. I would place him in ancient times and make him fight and learn and survive. He would be strong but not beacuse he was createad strong only beauce of his convictions!!!!

I like the story a little but it seems more like a manga than anything else, the chapters there are only interspersed time jumps so to speak and then nothing more than that and suddenly it comes And the fight with Baraquiel leaves a lot to be desired, and there are many things that are not explained throughout the chapters and it greatly affects the story in my opinion.

This is hot garbage I in the past wrote actual criticism in the hope of making it a better story but the author deleted it so f him here’s a 1 star

I was already imagining that the race would be human, in the end he invents an idiotic reason with idiotic arguments and launches it...I'm not surprised by the general evaluation of the work, there's no point in giving it the opportunity

it had a good start but it quickly went down the drain when baraquiel came to take him as a student, maybe it'll get better later on but meh author already ruined it.

At first it was interesting with a concept like that and the choice of reincarnation which was very interesting but unfortunately the execution was really lacking, it's like reading Chinese fanfiction

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Absolutely love the concept and how there is a timer. It makes it feel balanced without being too much of a disadvantage to the mc. I love how you are going full human in this. Keep up the good work. I’m cheering for you. 10/10

he's just a dumb muscle character, doesn't think much and the akenos father part was bad too, he's like a angry Goku with who doesn't think on what his actions do

Not my cup of tea, I've read xiania with better plot, at least they had some original moves on there fights and the forcing of the plot only happens maybe once, you've forced plot at least 3 times in 6 chapters, which barely had anything in them of substance to begin with, if this is the flow of the novel I'm out here

It's good and unique but in chapter 80 there is a mention of something which gives me an idea that mc will cuck akeno's father. And considering he trained him in the first few chapters and had a very good relationship with akeno's father so in my point of view it's pretty bad and I hate both cucking others(those who are mc's friends) and getting cucked fanfic.

Trash novel don’t read this fanfic. The MC knows that something bad will happen to Akeno and Shuri but did nothing to change their fate. He has the time chamber but he still allowed tragic event to happen to his love ones. Trash MC like the author of this book.

Good concept but fell out hard with that plot. So forced man. Get some writing advice or sth.

well it is brainless bad and dead you just made dxd a dragon ball verse like it is even worth it.characters don't even have their original personality in basic words it's just trash

It’s DBZ in DXD, all fighting with no story development. All that happens is the MC gets mad or something then ends up fighting with someone and before and after the fight its just unintelligent nonsense until he fight with the person again. Instead of having dialogue it’s just cursing and Chinese fanfic insults. Decent concept but very poorly executed

Mc is an easily triggered battle junky and author seems to follow general dbz format of rule of cool. Problem is this ain’t tv. Also boy shouldn’t tick you off unless grew up with racist

think 4.0 is too low considering the amount of trash cans that exist here in this app with way better rating, will never understand webnovel readers, not counting the absurd amount of bots that exist in multiple comment sections. a new idea, not the same dxd fanfic ao far, it has good potential imo. keep it up