Hunter x Hunter: A Selfish Wish (COMPLETED)

Sup! Came over from the Naruto FF with za Immortal Yami. I have some pretty high expectations for a ruthless mc though I wouldn't mind a different scenario. Welp, I have high expectations so I'ma give it a read. P.S. I'll do a proper review after maybe 10 chaps? I'll probably forget to do that though 😂

Reading this just feels like the whole story is pointless. The MC is an overpowered psychopath that has no feelings and gets everything he wants without struggle. All of the good stories have a goal that drives the MC forward and gives him strengh to overcome the obstacles, and there’s no such thing here. He wants power, but why? He doesn’t seem to care about anything, there’s no romance, he doesn’t have friends, no family, it doesn’t matter who lives or dies. Overall, the MC just feels empty, like he’s not even a person, and this is so boring to read. Then the author uses the excuse of being “evil” to justify the MC’s lack of personality... I like evil characters, and I love to read things from the villain’s perspective, but this was not the case here. There’s no character development, he’s just a bland character without emotions. Enough about the MC, now let’s talk a bit about the story itself. It’s clear that the author has a lot of knowledge about Hunter x Hunter, the grammar is good, and these are definitely good points in any fanfiction. The abilities he came up for the MC are very original and it made a cool image in my head. The pace is definitely a problem... It starts slow, then we have massive timeskip and suddenly the MC abused the hell out of his ability and he’s now the strongest being on the continent. Like, wtf? I almost dropped it there. I understand that some people find “training arcs” boring, and it must be even worse to write one, but this is simply ridiculous. It feels like he didn’t even have to work for it. Now the MC is extremely overpowered, more powerful than any character in the anime/manga, and the only “goal” he has is to get even more powerful... All the action we got so far is he beating people that are a thousand times weaker than himself. There’s no one who can challenge or be a threat to him. And this is not fun to read at all. Author, all of this is simply my opinion, and I believe that constructive criticism is the key to improve at everything we do. I’ve read your Naruto story too, and if I were to review it, my feedback would be basically the same.

Grammar: 4.69 Uploading Speed: 5 Story Development: 5 Character Design: 5 World Background: 5 Uploading Speed and World Background I don't think I really have to explain these two. The uploading Speed is relatively stable at 1 chap/day. The world background is pretty self explanatory, Hunter x Hunter. Though I do want to praise the author for adding the "valley of death", an imaginary place that did not exist in canon. It was smoothly integrated into the story which I like. Grammar The grammar is pretty "bormal", meaning it's pretty good, so I have no problems there. The Author just tends to be lazy from time to time... Like a "bormal" person. Story Development I think the story development is pretty good, the pacing is neither too fast that the readers can't catch up nor too slow that the readers get bored in 5 seconds. The increase/decrease in strength of the MC seems pretty logical and well thought out (to me at least). Character Design Ohh~ Now we are getting to the part I like. The main character is smart which is proven by how he is in college at the mere age of 15. The main character doesn't show much of a "bond" with his parents which is giving me Yami vibes and apparently also has a large junk COUGH* COUGH* Kona... He is also pretty ruthless which is shown by how he kills some hunters with no hesitation for the continuation of science! (lol no, he was just experimenting)Overall, I am getting Yami vibes so I like it. Personal Thoughts Although it is quite a pity the mc doesn't have much talent for nen as a child, I like how the MC opened up a path for himself to get stronger exponentially. The "system" ability is pretty broken but it also has its own limitations which I do think will lead to him losing a limb one day. Alluka is apparently a guy so my disappointment is immeasurable and my day is ruined. Lastly, BEGONE YOU COMPUTER SIMPS!

The Hunter X Hunter background information is good, but I have to be honest, the writing and grammar is not. Increases in power for the MC are not incremental, and a bit too sudden. There's not really much happening story-wise, and the pacing is pretty strange... There's nothing that really invests me in the character that is the MC, and the only reason I would have any care for the rest of the characters in this is because I have seen the anime. Not the worst... but I do definitely believe this could use a rewrite.

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I hope he is as ruthless as Yami, there are no good Hunter X Hunter fan-fics. Will you continue to post chapters of this like, Dream to immortality or will I have to join your patreon?

Garbage garbage garbage. So bad it doesn't even deserve an review. Awakens nen at 3 years old by doing absolutely nothing. next sentences: I don't have much talent. :( Author is a braindead moron.

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Not much to say, the story premise looks promising and if this one is anything like your previous fic... Then this is going to be within the top ten very soon. Good Luck.

This kind of reminds me of warlock of the magus world, MC is cold and ruthless and will do anything to become stronger. The only reason i rated it like this is because there's almost no character development. Time skip after time skip. I don't even understand how people cared about Mikasa, we never knew anything about her, the same can be said about the main character. Author even specifically said that *** scenes even happened but he never wrote about them. He never gives any of his characters any time for us to care about them. Understandably people would have much bigger reaction about Mikasa if we actually read about her for 15-20 chapters and the life between her and MC that they had for years, but this is completely skipped. Since we don't care for her, it doesn't matter if she's dead or not . I really don't understand why author is rushing this story so much, From what i heard he basically finished it without even reaching any big amount of chapters. Basically just anime had 148 episodes, the 2011 version, yet he is going to finish his novel at like 60-70 chapters that are quite short. That is only possible because there's so many time skips and no character development, there's no real reason to care about MC at all, if he died at the end i wouldn't mind it at all. The reason most people loved HxH is because we see Gon grow up slowly and we love quite a few other characters. Heck even Phantom troupe had its appeal to people who watched the show, you can see how well characters are developed there, you could know so many details about each one of the phantom troupe members, so many of their quirks and they are actually antagonists that show up in an ARC then they sometimes show up later but nothing important happens between them.

Why are there so many vulnerable idiots in the chat who cry for some strange reason. The author did everything right, and it should be so. If Mikasa became the main character's love interest, it would be extremely disappointing. How infuriated me are the stories where they take characters from different fanfiction and all after a couple of chapters make them vulnerable harem owners, who think in only one place.

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Amazing book...good author...me in the comments...whats there not to like. It won't hurt you physically to read it so in the words of a wise wise man...why not.😤😁

hey buddy, nice story And pls keep writing such types of mc types stories :->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->:->

Auto 5 star if it is HolyJoker's story😏😏 The most beautiful thing about your works is that the story is very very realistic. I specially likes your main characters. Yami is still the best🤣🤣

Wow , how cold .... I love it . .................................................................................................................................................................l.................

Probably the best HunterXHunter you will find on this website. The antagonist!MC is my cup of tea, and that is why I enjoy this story. If anyone else like an MC that isn't some goody-two-shoes, you will probably like it. While chapters are short, he uploads daily so it evens out. Go ahead and give this a go.

finally HxH fan fic................................................................... hope its good novel.........................................................